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You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the manager of the Parking Management Company. In your letter, you should tell: • why you ride a bicycle to work • what the problem is with the parking • v.3

You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the manager of the Parking Management Company. In your letter, you should tell: • why you ride a bicycle to work • what the problem is with the parking • v. 3
Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to you regarding a parking issue at Forest street. I ride a bike everyday between work, school and home. For me it is more convenient because it is free, I can keep myself fit and I do not have to sit in traffic for hours to get home. Forest street have a little space for bicycles and usually after 8 am it is already packed. There are no spaces left because cars are parking to bicycles spots because they can not park anywhere else but this is not a parking spot for cars. I would like you to flag this problem and suggest to put some signs in Forest street do not park cars on bicycle spot. You can also arrange a parking company who can issue a tickets to offenders or arrange a tow away. I hope this issue will be resolved and in a future there will be no problems with parking. Yours faithfully Robin Hood
Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing to you regarding a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
issue at Forest street.

I ride a bike
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
between work, school and home. For me it is more convenient
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is free, I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
myself fit and I do not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
sit in traffic for hours to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
home.

Forest street have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
space for bicycles and
usually
after 8 am it is already packed. There are no spaces
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
cars are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
to
The verb after "to" should be in the base form: "bicycle".
bicycles
spots
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they can not park anywhere else
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
this is not a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
spot for cars.

I would like you to flag this problem and
The verb 'suggest' is used with the gerund form: "suggest putting".
suggest to put
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
signs in Forest street do not park cars on bicycle spot. You can
also
arrange a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
who can issue
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a ticket" or simply "tickets"?
a tickets
to offenders or arrange a tow away.

I hope this issue will
be resolved
and in a future there will be no problems with parking.

Yours
faithfully


Robin Hood
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the manager of the Parking Management Company. In your letter, you should tell: • why you ride a bicycle to work • what the problem is with the parking • v. 3

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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