The office where you work does not have a proper car park. Write a letter to your manager and say– Explain the problem of no parking space available. – Suggest a solution for the car park problem. – Explain how this will help your company. v.2
The office where you work does not have a proper car park. Write a letter to your manager and say– Explain the problem of no parking space available. – Suggest a solution for the car park problem. – Explain how this will help your company. v. 2
Dear Sir,
I would like to outline an area that is causing inconvenience to a large group of our employees, which has come to light in our recent staff survey. Please allow me to elaborate.
While all the employees rated our infrastructure to be the best in business, a considerable amount of employees, almost 70% of them, expressed their dissatisfaction with the parking area. You see, when our office shifted to this new building 3 years back, there were only 200 employees, and the 250 parking spots were sufficient for staff and visitors. But with the company' s expansion last year, as you already know, we now have 300 employees working for us. As a result, there are not enough parking lots for all our staff members since 270 out of 300 commute to work in their own cars, and thus some employees are forced to park their cars outside of the office area, which leaves their vehicles vulnerable to thieves and robbers.
Thus, I reckon that we rent the empty space adjacent to our office, which is open for lease, and use it as a parking area. If we fulfill our employee' s demand by providing them with the parking spots they need, then it will raise our over all employee satisfaction index by a huge margin, which can help us secure a position in Forbe' s top 100 best places to work.
Thanks and looking forward to see the new implementation as soon as possible,
Truly,
Alexa
Dear Sir,
I would like to outline an
area
that is
causing inconvenience to a large group of our
employees
, which has
come
to light in our recent staff survey.
Please
allow
me to elaborate.
While all the
employees
rated our infrastructure to be the best in business, a considerable amount of
employees
, almost 70% of them, expressed their dissatisfaction with the
parking
area
. You
see
, when our office shifted to this new building 3 years back, there were
only
200
employees
, and the 250
parking
spots were sufficient for staff and visitors.
But
with the
company&
#039; s expansion last year, as you already know, we
now
have 300
employees
working for us.
As a result
, there are not
enough
parking
lots for all our staff members since 270 out of 300
commute
to work in their
own
cars, and
thus
some
employees
are forced
to park their cars
outside of
the office
area
, which
leaves
their vehicles vulnerable to thieves and robbers.
Thus
, I reckon that we rent the empty space adjacent to our office, which is open for lease, and
use
it as a
parking
area
. If we fulfill our
employee&
#039; s demand by providing them with the
parking
spots they need, then it will raise our over all
employee
satisfaction index by a huge margin, which can
help
us secure a position in
Forbe&
#039; s top 100 best places to work.
Thanks and looking forward to
see
the new implementation as
soon
as possible,
Truly
,
Alexa
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17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes