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You have recently attended a 90th birthday party of a close relative. It was successfully organised by hotel staff. Write a letter to the manager and say– Describe the event. – Talk about the facilities provided to guests, especially the elderly. – Me v.1

You have recently attended a 90th birthday party of a close relative. It was successfully organised by hotel staff. Write a letter to the manager and say– Describe the event. – Talk about the facilities provided to guests, especially the elderly. – Me v. 1
Dear Mr. Morrison, By way of introduction, my name is Mariam and I am writing to you with regards to the birthday party that was held at your hotel last Saturday. The event was organized for my grandmother Jennifer, who was celebrating her 90th anniversary. First of all, I would like to thank you for the properly managed event. The guests were quite pleased with the foods and soft drinks. They also liked the dancing music and the sing-along contest that maintained the upbeat atmosphere during the whole period of the party. It is worth mentioning that it was highly appreciated by our elderly guests that the hotel was well equipped and was suitable for senior attendees. In particular, some of the participants were pleased to find out that there was an option of having wheelchairs instead of regular chairs, and that they were able to easily move within the hotel premises in those. I would also like to express special gratitude to one of your waiters, whose name is Jim for the high quality services provided. Jim was exceptionally responsive, would the guests have any question or request. Sincerely, Mariam
Dear Mr. Morrison,

By way of introduction, my name is
Mariam and
I am writing to you
with regards to
the birthday party that
was held
at your hotel last Saturday. The
event
was organized
for my grandmother Jennifer, who was celebrating her 90th anniversary.

First of all
, I would like to thank you for the
properly
managed
event
. The guests were quite
pleased
with the foods and soft drinks. They
also
liked the dancing music and the sing-along contest that maintained the upbeat atmosphere during the whole period of the party.

It is worth mentioning that it was
highly
appreciated by our elderly guests that the hotel was
well equipped
and was suitable for senior attendees.
In particular
,
some of the
participants were
pleased
to find out that there was an option of having wheelchairs
instead
of regular chairs, and that they were able to
easily
move
within the hotel premises in those.

I would
also
like to express special gratitude to one of your waiters, whose name is Jim for the high quality services provided. Jim was
exceptionally
responsive, would the guests have any question or request.

Sincerely
,

Mariam
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You have recently attended a 90th birthday party of a close relative. It was successfully organised by hotel staff. Write a letter to the manager and say– Describe the event. – Talk about the facilities provided to guests, especially the elderly. – Me v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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