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You had borrowed money from your friend when you were facing some financial problems and forgot to pay it back. Write a letter to your friend and in your letter: •Apologize for being late in returning the money•Explain what happened•Say how you are g v.2

You had borrowed money from your friend when you were facing some financial problems and forgot to pay it back. Write a letter to your friend and in your letter: •Apologize for being late in returning the money•Explain what happened•Say how you are g v. 2
Dear Rakesh, Hope this letter finds you in the best of spirits. I am writing this letter to not only thank you but also to request your forgiveness. First of all, I adore your gesture for lending me a fortune of the amount when I was in dire need. To be honest, I have been feeling guilty that I delayed to repay my debt and sincerely apologize down from my heart and I mean it. For six months my life has been a rollercoaster and I am dealing with plenty of personal as well as professional problems. On top of this, I had a few other bills to pay back against both house loans and personal loans. I would really like to refund your cash as soon as possible. To overcome this issue, I have applied for an advanced salary from my organization and would be expecting the money in a couple of weeks. Apart from this, I invite your family for lunch. I hope you understand my situation and accept my apologies. Yours truly, Sudheerkumar
Dear Rakesh,

Hope this letter finds you in the best of spirits. I am writing this letter to not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
thank you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
to request your forgiveness.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I adore your gesture for lending me a fortune of the amount when I was in dire need. To be honest, I have been feeling guilty that I
The verb 'delayed' is used with the gerund form: "delayed repaying".
delayed to repay
my debt and
sincerely
apologize down from my heart and I mean it.

For six months my life has been a
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
rollercoaster and
I am dealing with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of personal
as well
as professional problems.

On top of this, I had a few other bills to pay back against both
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
loans and personal loans.

I would
really
like to refund your cash as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. To overcome this issue, I have applied for an advanced salary from my organization and would be expecting the money in a couple of weeks. Apart from this, I invite your family for lunch.

I hope you understand my situation and accept my apologies.

Yours
truly
,

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Sudheerkumar
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You had borrowed money from your friend when you were facing some financial problems and forgot to pay it back. Write a letter to your friend and in your letter: •Apologize for being late in returning the money•Explain what happened•Say how you are g v. 2

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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