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You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs. Write a Jetter to the building manager. In your letter• describe the problem. • say what you think should be done about it. • ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem. v.2

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs. Write a Jetter to the building manager. In your letter• describe the problem. • say what you think should be done about it. • ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem. v. 2
Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing about a problem in my apartment that needs some repairs. The kitchen sink has been leaking for some time now, and I believe the drain pipe should be replaced. I think you should take a look at it. The leak in the kitchen sink is causing a serious problem. Because the area under the sink has become very damp, the wood is beginning to rot. Unfortunately, it appears that the cause of the dampness is a hole in the drain pipe. In my opinion, the drain pipe should be replaced as soon as possible. Otherwise, the problem will only get worse. If we ignore it, the entire cabinet will have to be replaced eventually. I suggest that you come to my apartment and take a look at the leaky sink with me. I can show you the damaged area, and we can discuss the best action to take. I hope you agree with my suggestion. Let me know when you can come by and look at the pipe. Yours sincerely, Ethel Wilson
Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing about a problem in my apartment that needs
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
repairs. The kitchen
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sink
has been leaking for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
, and I believe the drain pipe should
be replaced
. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
you should take a look at it.

The leak in the kitchen
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sink
is causing a serious problem.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
the area under the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sink
has become
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
damp, the wood is beginning to rot. Unfortunately, it appears that the cause of the dampness is a hole in the drain pipe.

In my opinion, the drain pipe should
be replaced
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible.
Otherwise
, the problem will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
worse. If we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
it, the entire cabinet will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
be replaced
eventually
.

I suggest that you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to my apartment and take a look at the leaky
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sink
with me. I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
you the damaged area, and we can discuss the best action to take.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with my suggestion.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me know when you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
by and look at the pipe.

Yours
sincerely
,

Ethel Wilson
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs. Write a Jetter to the building manager. In your letter• describe the problem. • say what you think should be done about it. • ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
177 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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