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Your neighbor is a musician who practices the piano during the day. Sometimes the sound of his playing causes problems for you, especially when you need to study at home. Write a letter to your neighbor. In your letter- Explain that the sound of his v.3

Your neighbor is a musician who practices the piano during the day. Sometimes the sound of his playing causes problems for you, especially when you need to study at home. Write a letter to your neighbor. In your letter- Explain that the sound of his v. 3
Dear Mr. Avery, I am writing to you in connection with your piano sound reaching my apartment through our shared wall. First of all, I am a fan of your music and a great admirer of your artistic knowledge. As you know, I am currently studying masters degree and preparing for the final exam which is commences in a month. I understand that, you need to keep practicing in order to keep your skills sharper, but continuous sound sometimes overbearing and am not able to concentrate on my studies. Also, I had numerous sleepless nights because of this sound pollution. It would be great, if you could move the piano from your living room to the other end of the house, and if possible could you please avoid practicing in the night times so that I can rest well. During morning hours, I will study in my college library so that you can practice. I look forward to your positive reply. Yours sincerely, Bala
Dear Mr. Avery,

I am writing to you in connection with your piano sound reaching my apartment through our shared wall.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I am a fan of your music and a great admirer of your artistic knowledge.

As you know, I am
currently
studying
For an academic degree, use "master’s".
masters
degree and preparing for the final exam which is commences in a month. I understand that, you need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
practicing in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
sharper,
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but
continuous sound
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sometimes
overbearing and am not able to concentrate on my studies.
Also
, I had numerous sleepless nights
because of this
sound pollution.

It would be great, if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
the piano from your living room to the other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
, and if possible could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
avoid practicing in the
This word is normally spelled as one.
night times
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can rest well. During morning hours, I will study in my college library
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that you can practice.

I look forward to your
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
reply.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Bala
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your neighbor is a musician who practices the piano during the day. Sometimes the sound of his playing causes problems for you, especially when you need to study at home. Write a letter to your neighbor. In your letter- Explain that the sound of his v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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