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A friend you made while youe were studing abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. write a letter to this friend. In your letter - Tell your friend v.2

A friend you made while youe were studing abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. write a letter to this friend. In your letter - Tell your friend v. 2
Dear Parth, Happy to know about you after such a long time. I got your letter last week and I am writing this latter in response to find the job in my location. One of my friends is running a coaching class of the computer courses near to my home. He has requirement of trainer who have good knowledge about various computer languages like C, C++, Java and many others. You have to provide the coaching for whole day and surely you will get the satisfactory reward. As you completed the master degree in computer science with me, I know your are the best choise for this vacancy. Additionally, you have 2 years of experience in the same field. The coaching class has a website - www. goodcoaching. com. You can directly apply from there in career section of the website. Also, mention my name in detail section as a reference. Lots of love, Kalpesh Sangani.
Dear
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Parth
,

Happy to know about you after such a long time. I
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got
your letter last
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
week and
I am writing this latter in response to find the job in my location.

One of my friends is running a coaching
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
of the computer courses near to my home. He has requirement of trainer who have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
knowledge about various computer languages like C, C++, Java and
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many
others. You
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have to
provide the coaching for whole day and
surely
you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the satisfactory reward. As you completed the master degree in computer science with me, I know your are the best
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choise
for this vacancy.
Additionally
, you have 2 years of experience in the same field.

The coaching
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class
has a website
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
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www
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
goodcoaching
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
com
. You can
directly
apply from there in career section of the website.
Also
, mention my name in detail section as a reference.

Lots of
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love
,

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Kalpesh
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Sangani
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter A friend you made while youe were studing abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. write a letter to this friend. In your letter - Tell your friend v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
156 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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