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Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: •explain what you are currently doing•describe your suitability for this area of work•say when you can attend an interview v.2

Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: •explain what you are currently doing•describe your suitability for this area of work•say when you can attend an interview v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in reference to the advertisement that I have read in the Times newspaper yesterday about your need of a waitress. I am working in a restaurant near my campus and I am happy with my schedule and my colleagues but the later one will close for a period of 6 months for a renovation reason and I need to find an alternative job to prevent any economic issues. First of all, let me start with my major I am currently completing my degree in hotel management and I have already attended several training in food safety. Moreover I have a 5 years’ experience in this domain so I know very well how to serve people and help them in choosing their dishes. Adding to the already mentioned I am very friendly and I have an excellent communication skills and I am flexible on days and night duties. Attached you can find a copy of my résumé along with my cover letter. I am available for a job interview at your convenience time except for Monday & Wednesday afternoon since I have classes at the university. Looking forward to hear from you. Yours faithfully Rana Kandar
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in reference to the advertisement that I have read in the Times newspaper yesterday about your need of a waitress. I am working in a restaurant near my
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
campus and
I am happy with my schedule and my colleagues
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the later one will close for a period of 6 months for a renovation reason and I need to find an alternative job to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
any economic issues.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
with my major I am
currently
completing my degree in hotel management and I have already attended
Possible agreement error. The noun training seems to be uncountable; consider using: "some training".
several training
in food safety.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Moreover
I have a 5 years’ experience in this domain
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so
I know
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
well how to serve
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them in choosing their dishes. Adding to the already mentioned I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
friendly and I have an excellent communication
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
skills and
I am flexible on days and night duties.

Attached you can find a copy of my résumé along with my cover letter. I am available for a job interview at your convenience time
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
except for
Monday
Possible spelling mistake found.
&amp
; Wednesday afternoon since I have classes at the university.

Looking forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
from you.

Yours
faithfully


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Rana
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Kandar
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS letter Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: •explain what you are currently doing•describe your suitability for this area of work•say when you can attend an interview v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
201 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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