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Your mentor recommended you to learn a new language and gave you contact details of a teacher. Following his advice, you need to write a letter to the teacher and say- What is your motivation to learn a new language? - How can the teacher help you? - When w v.4

Your mentor recommended you to learn a new language and gave you contact details of a teacher. Following his advice, you need to write a letter to the teacher and say- What is your motivation to learn a new language? - How can the teacher help you? - When w v. 4
Dear Mr Ryan Lee, I am writing this letter to inform you that I received your contact details from Mr. Brad Pitt, who is my mentor, because I am interested to learn french. Since, I plan to immigrate to Quebec in Canada, where knowledge of french is essential, I wish to start immediately. Let me explain in detail. Firstly, I have absolutely no background of the language and need to start from the basics. Secondly, I have heard some amazing reviews about your teaching style, where you provide undivided attention to the students. Lastly, although I am working during the week, I can reschedule my shifts so that I can attend the weekday classes, thus keeping the the weekend free for practice and self-study. Lastly, without further ado, I would like to join the batch starting next Monday. Moreover, to get a head start of the syllabus, I have taken the free trial available on your website and believe I will be ready by next week. I look forward to your reply and hope you consider this letter as an intent to apply. Your Faithfully, Mary Smith
Dear Mr Ryan Lee,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I received your contact
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
from Mr. Brad Pitt, who is my mentor,
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because
I
am interested
to learn
"French" needs to be capitalized when not used as a verb.
french
. Since, I plan to immigrate to Quebec in Canada, where knowledge of french is essential, I wish to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
immediately.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me
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explain
in detail.
Firstly
, I have
absolutely
no background of the language and need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
from the basics.
Secondly
, I have heard
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
amazing reviews about your teaching style, where you provide undivided attention to the students.
Lastly
, although I am working during the week, I can reschedule my shifts
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can attend the weekday classes,
thus
keeping
Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only "the" or "the" is left.
the the
weekend free for practice and self-study.

Lastly
, without
further
ado, I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the batch starting
next
Monday.
Moreover
, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a head
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
of the syllabus, I have taken the free trial available on your website and believe I will be ready by
next
week.

I look forward to your reply and hope you consider this letter as an intent to apply.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
Faithfully
,

Mary Smith
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter Your mentor recommended you to learn a new language and gave you contact details of a teacher. Following his advice, you need to write a letter to the teacher and say- What is your motivation to learn a new language? - How can the teacher help you? - When w v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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