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You can't attend a meeting with your friend. In your letter: cancel the meeting and apologiesexplain why you cancelsuggest where and when you could see each other v.2

You can't attend a meeting with your friend. In your letter: cancel the meeting and apologiesexplain why you cancelsuggest where and when you could see each other v. 2
Dear Mohammad, Hi. How’s life treating you? What are you up to these days? Sorry for not being in touch for so long. I’m afraid that I have some bad news. I won’t be able to attend the meeting we arranged in next week although I did my best to do so. I’m terribly sorry and hope to be able to make it up to you. My mother has become ill since last Sunday, which I suppose is due to the sudden cold weather. My crucial task these days is to give her the care she needs the most, and I won’t be able to leave her side till she gets better and receives the all clear from the doctor. The doctor said the illness will be cured completely within 10 days. Thus, I’d be free after that to meet you. If it’s okay with you, let’s meet on the second Tuesday from now. I suggest we get together in one of Pulp bar’s branches in the afternoon and I treat you since I’m the one canceling the next week’s arrangement. Again, I’m terribly sorry for not being able to meet you next week. Pass my regards to your family. Aidin
Dear Mohammad,

Hi. How’s life treating you? What are you up to these days? Sorry for not being in touch for
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long.

I’m afraid that I have
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some
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bad
news. I won’t be
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able
to attend the meeting we arranged in
next
week although I did my best
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to do
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so
.
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I
’m
terribly
sorry and hope to be
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able
to
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make
it up to you.

My mother has become ill since last Sunday, which I suppose is due to the sudden
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
weather. My crucial task these days is to give her the care she needs the most, and I won’t be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
able
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
her side till she
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
better and receives the all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
from the doctor.

The doctor said the illness will
be cured
completely within 10 days.
Thus
, I’d be free after that to
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meet
you. If it’s okay with you,
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let
’s
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meet
on the second Tuesday from
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now
. I suggest we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
together in one of Pulp bar’s branches in the afternoon and I treat you since I’m the one canceling the
next
week’s arrangement.

Again, I’m
terribly
sorry for not being
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
able
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you
next
week.

Pass my regards to your family.

Aidin
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You can't attend a meeting with your friend. In your letter: cancel the meeting and apologiesexplain why you cancelsuggest where and when you could see each other v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
200 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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