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You recently red an article in newspaper and come to know that article was written by your freiend. Since you don't have the contact details for your friend. Write a letter to newspaper and mention. - What is the article about? - Why you need contact d v.2

You recently red an article in newspaper and come to know that article was written by your freiend. Since you don't have the contact details for your friend. Write a letter to newspaper and mention. - What is the article about? - Why you need contact d v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to request information about my friend whose recent article is published in your newspaper last Monday. The article was about the life of our professor who won the national awards due to his academic achievements. All the facts and information provided in this write-up are accurate except one, which is about his marriage date. I have tried to contact my friend several times to inform him about the wrong information but it seems his contact number has been changed. Therefore, I need help from your agency to provide me his updated information. I would really appreciate if you can get updated contacts details from your records and send me via email. I am sending my personal identity card along with this letter to preserve your privacy policy. I hope you will process this information as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Vivek Dhiman
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to request
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
about my friend whose recent article
is published
in your newspaper last Monday.

The article was about the life of our professor who won the national awards due to his academic achievements. All the facts and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
provided in this write-up are accurate except one, which is about his marriage date.

I have tried to contact my friend several times to inform him about the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it seems his contact number has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
.
Therefore
, I need
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
from your agency to provide me his updated information.

I would
really
appreciate if you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
updated contacts
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
from your records and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me via email. I am sending my personal identity card along with this letter to preserve your privacy policy.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope you will process this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible.

Yours
faithfully
,

Vivek
Possible spelling mistake found.
Dhiman
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS letter You recently red an article in newspaper and come to know that article was written by your freiend. Since you don't have the contact details for your friend. Write a letter to newspaper and mention. - What is the article about? - Why you need contact d v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
148 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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