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Your friend wants to send her his children to your house for the weekend Write a letter to him her and say Agree to this arrangement Say what time is suitable for you Describe what you are planning to do v.2

Your friend wants to send her his children to your house for the weekend Write a letter to him her and say Agree to this arrangement Say what time is suitable for you Describe what you are planning to do v. 2
Dear Priya, Hope this letter finds you well. I have received your letter and glad to know that you are planning to drop your kids at my house over the weekend. Firstly, my whole family is very excited to have them with us and we are looking forward to spend some good time together. I would make sure that they will have a pleasant and comfortable stay at my house. Since, you are leaving to Pune on Saturday morning, hence, it would be convenient to leave the children at my house on Friday night post 8PM as I will be back from the office around 7PM. However, as I am meeting your children after a while, therefore, I have planned few activities for them to fortify my bond with them. On Saturday, I will take them to zoo as it is very famous among children and offering special wildlife program on Saturday morning. On Sunday, my society is organizing fun fare event for children and arranging competition, I feel children would be happy to participate in fun fare event. I hope you would be satisfied with my planning and would not worry too much about children. I look forward to meeting you all on Friday. Best regards, Sonali
Dear Priya,

Hope this letter finds you well. I have received your letter and glad to know that you are planning to drop your kids at my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
over the weekend.

Firstly
, my whole family is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
excited to have them with
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
us and
we are looking forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to spending".
to spend
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
time together. I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure that they will have a pleasant and comfortable stay at my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

Since, you are leaving to Pune on Saturday morning,
hence
, it would be convenient to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
at my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
on Friday night post 8PM as I will be back from the office around 7PM.

However
, as I am meeting your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
after a while,
therefore
, I have planned few activities for them to fortify my bond with them. On Saturday, I will take them to zoo as it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
and offering special wildlife program on Saturday morning. On Sunday, my society is organizing fun fare
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
and arranging competition, I feel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
would be happy to participate in fun fare
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
. I hope you would
be satisfied
with my planning and would not worry too much about children.

I look forward to meeting you all on Friday.

Best regards,

Sonali
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter Your friend wants to send her his children to your house for the weekend Write a letter to him her and say Agree to this arrangement Say what time is suitable for you Describe what you are planning to do v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
207 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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