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You are currently living in a rented flat but will be moving out soon. Write a letter to the owner of the flat to thank him and introduce one of your friends to move in. In your fetter, you should: • thank the owner of the flat for being so nice and help v.2

You are currently living in a rented flat but will be moving out soon. Write a letter to the owner of the flat to thank him and introduce one of your friends to move in. In your fetter, you should: • thank the owner of the flat for being so nice and help v. 2
Dear Mr. Smith I am one of your tenants living in 1BHK flat with number 401 of your apartment. Currently, staying in the same flat but planning to leave next month. I am writing this epistle to appreciate the assistance provided by you during this one year of the stay at your apartment and giving you the reference of one of my friends who want to move in this home. First of all, I would like to thank you for your helpful and kind behaviour. I have never faced any difficulty while living in your rented apartment but, if there was any issue, you had resolved it within 24 hours. I am really happy by the services provided in your flat. I do not want to leave this home but I have to shift because, I got transferred to London. That is why, I am vacating the apartment at the start of next month. But one of my friends, John Thompson, wants to rent this house. Recently, He got a job in Infosys which is at walking distance from this flat. John likes to live in neat and clean place so he will keep your place clean. Moreover, he is not a party lover so you will not get any complaint against him. At last, I would like to say that could you please give me security money back on 2nd of next month as I am leaving on that day. Yours Sincerely Paul Fernandas
Dear Mr. Smith

I am one of your tenants living in 1BHK
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flat
with number 401 of your
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apartment
.
Currently
, staying in the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flat
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
planning to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
next
month. I am writing this epistle to appreciate the assistance provided by you during this one year of the stay at your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
and giving you the reference of one of my friends who want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
in this home.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I would like to thank you for your helpful and kind
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
. I have never faced any difficulty while living in your rented
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
, if there was any issue, you had resolved it within 24 hours. I am
really
happy by the services provided in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flat
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
do not want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
this home
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
shift
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
transferred to London.
That is
why, I am vacating the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
of
next
month.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
one of my friends, John Thompson, wants to rent this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
. Recently, He
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a job in
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Infosys
which is at walking distance from this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flat
. John likes to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in neat and clean place
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
he will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
your place clean.
Moreover
, he is not a party lover
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
you will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
any complaint against him.

At last, I would like to say that could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
give me security money back on 2nd of
next
month as I am leaving on that day.

Yours
Sincerely


Paul
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Fernandas
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are currently living in a rented flat but will be moving out soon. Write a letter to the owner of the flat to thank him and introduce one of your friends to move in. In your fetter, you should: • thank the owner of the flat for being so nice and help v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
244 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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