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Your friend wants to come to your city and stay with you for one week for a holiday. However, it is impossible for you to accompany him. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should; • apologise to your friend• explain why you cannot stay v.2

Your friend wants to come to your city and stay with you for one week for a holiday. However, it is impossible for you to accompany him. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should; • apologise to your friend• explain why you cannot stay v. 2
Dear Thompson I am doing well and hope that you are also sailing on the same boat. I came to know that you have planned to visit Shimla to spend your vacations at the start of next month. I am pleased that you want to spend a quality time with me by staying at my place during your visit to my city. But, sorry to say, I will not be available at home at the time of your arrival. I am going to Bangalore due to business requirement for fifteen days next month. It will not be possible for me to stay with you during your trip. I was very happy when I read your letter that you are coming to live at my home with your family and we will be meeting after three years. But, all of my excitement got ruined when I received an e-mail from my manager for a business trip coming month. You should not worry about your stay. You can live at my place with my parents, they will be overwhelmed seeing you after long time. Otherwise, if possible, could you change your plan and come a few days earlier than your planned journey. Appolozise once again. Waiting for your response! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Yours truly Daniel
Dear Thompson

I am doing well and hope that you are
also
sailing on the same boat. I came to know that you have planned to visit
Possible spelling mistake found.
Shimla
to spend your vacations at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
of
next
month.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
pleased
that you want to spend a quality time with me by staying at my place during your visit to my city.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
, sorry to say, I will not be available at home at the time of your arrival.

I am going to Bangalore due to business requirement for fifteen days
next
month. It will not be possible for me to stay with you during your trip. I was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
happy when I read your letter that you are coming to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
at my home with your
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
family and
we will be meeting after three years.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
, all of my excitement
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
ruined when I received an e-mail from my manager for a business trip coming month.

You should not worry about your stay. You can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
at my place with my parents, they will
be overwhelmed
seeing you after long time.
Otherwise
, if possible, could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
your plan and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
a few days earlier than your planned journey.

Possible spelling mistake found.
Appolozise
once again. Waiting for your response! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

Yours
truly


Daniel
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your friend wants to come to your city and stay with you for one week for a holiday. However, it is impossible for you to accompany him. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should; • apologise to your friend• explain why you cannot stay v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
218 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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