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You are planning a holiday in another country and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to the friend asking him/her to join you and explain: - Why are you taking a holiday? - What is your holiday plan? - Why would you like hi v.3

You are planning a holiday in another country and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to the friend asking him/her to join you and explain: - Why are you taking a holiday? - What is your holiday plan? - Why would you like hi v. 3
Dear Anna, Hello, how are you? Hope you and your family are having a joyous time. I am writing this letter to invite you to accompany me for one-week holiday trip with me. For the past one-year I was occupied with a lot of work pressure in my company IDFC Mutual Funds as they have launched a New Fund Offer for its investors. The entire responsibility from the launch of the new scheme, receiving the applications, depositing the high value cheques and sending the report to our back office was on me. Since now the work pressure has reduced a bit, I am thinking to take one-week holiday. I am planning to organise a trip to Singapore for a week from 12th December to 19th December. It is a beautiful island which is not only famous for being the cleanest country in the world but also has many famous tourist attractions such as Universal Studios, Singapore Flyer and Gardens by the Bay. We will have a great fun there enjoying the exotic seafood, shopping, as well as spending a day on Singapore cruise. I would like you to accompany me on this holiday as I am sure we will enjoy there doing many exciting activities together. Kindly schedule all your work so that you can take out your time and plan with me for this holiday trip. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Take care With love, Prabhpreet Kaur
Dear Anna,

Hello, how are you? Hope you and your family are having a joyous time. I am writing this letter to invite you to accompany me for one-week holiday trip with me.

For the past one-year I
was occupied
with
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a lot of
work pressure in my
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company
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IDFC
Mutual Funds as they have launched a New Fund Offer for its investors. The entire responsibility from the launch of the new scheme, receiving the applications, depositing the high value
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cheques
and sending the report to our back office was on me. Since
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
the work pressure has
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reduced
a bit, I am thinking to take one-week holiday.

I am planning to
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organise
a trip to Singapore for a week from 12th December to 19th December. It is a
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beautiful
island which is not
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only
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famous
for being the cleanest country in the world
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but
also
has
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many
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famous
tourist attractions such as Universal Studios, Singapore Flyer and Gardens by the Bay. We will have a great fun there enjoying the exotic seafood, shopping,
as well
as spending a day on Singapore cruise.

I would like you to accompany me on this holiday as I am sure we will enjoy there doing
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many
exciting activities together. Kindly schedule all your work
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so
that you can take out your time and plan with me for this holiday trip.

I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
. Take
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care


With
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love
,

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Prabhpreet
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Kaur
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You are planning a holiday in another country and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to the friend asking him/her to join you and explain: - Why are you taking a holiday? - What is your holiday plan? - Why would you like hi v. 3

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
240 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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