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Letter: You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, 〈Descri v.2

Letter: You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, 〈Descri v. 2
Dear Sir, I am pursuing Ph. D in History and currently residing in a double occupancy room in college hostel with a partner from a musical studies. We both share different interests and our studies requires different way of approach. I am writing to inform you about the issues that I am facing with this arrangement those are directly impacting my studies in a big way. I am in the final phase of writing my thesis and it requires a lot of focus and research that I prefer doing in quiet environment, whereas my roommate curates his musical notes in the same room when I am studying. I have tried discussing the same with him but he is ready to listen. Because of the noise around, I am not at all able to concentrate on my studies and this is bothering me a lot. I request you to please accomodate me with a student from my course or preferably give me a single occupancy room. This support of yours will be a great help for me. Looking forward to hear from you. Yours faithfully, Mandeep Kaur
Dear Sir,

I am pursuing
The more common abbreviation of the term 'philosophiae doctor' is "Ph.D.".
Ph. D
in History and
currently
residing in a double occupancy room in college hostel with a partner from a musical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
. We both share
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
interests and our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
requires
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
way of approach.

I am writing to inform you about the issues that I am facing with this arrangement those are
directly
impacting my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
way. I am in the final phase of writing my thesis and it requires
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
focus and research that I prefer doing in quiet environment, whereas my roommate curates his musical notes in the same room when I am studying.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have tried discussing the same with him
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but
he is ready to listen.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
of the noise around, I am not at all able to concentrate on my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
and this is bothering me a lot.

I request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
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accomodate
me with a student from my course or
preferably
give me a single occupancy room. This support of yours will be a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
for me. Looking forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Mandeep
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Kaur
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter Letter: You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, 〈Descri v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
185 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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