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A friend is expecting you to stay with him in two weeks time, but unfortunately you forgot that you have a business trip at the same time. Write letter to friend-apologise and say that you cannot come to visit-explain why you will not able to visit-suggest v.2

A friend is expecting you to stay with him in two weeks time, but unfortunately you forgot that you have a business trip at the same time. Write letter to friend-apologise and say that you cannot come to visit-explain why you will not able to visit-suggest v. 2
Dear john Hi! How are you? I am fine and I hope you are also sailing on the same boat. The purpose of mine to penning down this epistle is to feel sorry to you for unable to coming at your home to stay with you. To be honest, I have been feeling so guilty that I delayed writing to you. I know that you are waiting for me to come at your home. I feel very sorry for not coming, indeed, I also want to meet with you but because of some reasons I am unable to visit you. The reason for not coming at your home is my business trip which will also held on the same week in which I promised you to meet you. Indeed, this trip is very important for my career as it gives the uplift to my professional career. As, I am a software engineer and This trip give me the chance to enhance my knowledge. Therefore, I am unable to come at your home to meet with you. In addition, I will definitely meet you after coming back from that trip as I will free for the next 10 days. So, it give us the opportunity to spend some quality time with each other without any interruption. Pay my regards to your parents and wish you a good luck. Yours truly Shiwani
Dear john

Hi! How are you? I am fine and I hope you are
also
sailing on the same boat. The purpose of mine to penning down this epistle is to feel sorry to you for unable to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coming
at your home to stay with you.

To be honest, I have been feeling
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
guilty that I delayed writing to you. I know that you are waiting for me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
at your home. I feel
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
sorry for not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coming
,
indeed
, I
also
want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
with you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
reasons I am unable to visit you.

The reason for not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coming
at your home is my business
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
which will
also
held on the same week in which I promised you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you.
Indeed
, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for my career as it gives the uplift to my professional career. As, I am a software engineer and This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
give me the chance to enhance my knowledge.
Therefore
, I am unable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
at your home to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
with you.

In addition
, I will definitely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you after
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coming
back from that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
as I will free for the
next
10 days.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, it
Did you mean "gives"?
give
us the opportunity to spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
quality time with each other without any interruption.

Pay my regards to your parents and wish you a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
luck.

Yours
truly


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Shiwani
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter A friend is expecting you to stay with him in two weeks time, but unfortunately you forgot that you have a business trip at the same time. Write letter to friend-apologise and say that you cannot come to visit-explain why you will not able to visit-suggest v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
229 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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