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Writing task 1 (a letter)You are going on a short holiday soon and would like to invite a friend to join you. Write a letter to him/her and say– Explain why you need a holiday. – Explain why you want your friend to come. – Where and when do you want t v.2

Writing task 1 (a letter)You are going on a short holiday soon and would like to invite a friend to join you. Write a letter to him/her and say– Explain why you need a holiday. – Explain why you want your friend to come. – Where and when do you want t v. 2
Dear Priya, Hope you are doing great with your health and spirit. I am writing this letter to invite you for a short trekking holiday at Saputara. As you know I was busy in my IELTS exam preparation and my office so I didn' t get a chance to go for a holiday but now I am done with IELTS exam and very tired with a hectic routine. To have some relaxation, fun and adventure I have decided to enroll my self for Trekking camp organised by one of the NGO in my town for Saputara which involves 2 nights/3 days tour including traveling cost and meals. I know you have keen interest in adventures so I decided to invite you for this holiday. It would be great if you can take a break from your busy schedule and join us. I have enrolled but not booked the date yet but 4 dates are available 11th August, 17th August, 21st August and 29th August so please write back to me which date you prefer so based on that I can book seat for both of us. However, I preferred 21st August because of weekend we both will not have any issue of leave from our current organisation. Looking forward to hearing from you. Kind Regards Divya
Dear Priya,

Hope you are doing great with your health and spirit. I am writing this letter to invite you for a short trekking holiday at
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tired with a hectic routine. To have
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relaxation, fun and adventure I have decided to enroll my self for Trekking camp
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by one of the NGO in my town for
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which involves 2 nights/3 days tour including traveling cost and meals. I know you have keen interest in adventures
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so
I decided to invite you for this holiday. It would be great if you can take a break from your busy schedule and
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join
us. I have enrolled
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not booked the date
yet
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but
4 dates are available 11th August, 17th August, 21st August and 29th August
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so
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please
write back to me which date you prefer
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based on that I can book seat for both of us.
However
, I preferred 21st August
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because
of weekend we both will not have any issue of
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leave
from our
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current
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organisation
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Looking forward to hearing from you.

Kind Regards

Divya
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter Writing task 1 (a letter)You are going on a short holiday soon and would like to invite a friend to join you. Write a letter to him/her and say– Explain why you need a holiday. – Explain why you want your friend to come. – Where and when do you want t v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
215 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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