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Your friend is searching for a job, write a letter to your friend. •Describe the details of the job•Why it is suitable for him/her•How to apply for the job. v.1

Your friend is searching for a job, write a letter to your friend. •Describe the details of the job•Why it is suitable for him/her•How to apply for the job. v. 1
Dear James, How are you doing? I hope this letter finds you in good health and mental peace. Based on our last discussion, I remember that how desperately you were looking for a job change. I am so excited to tell you that there is a perfect opportunity for you in my organization, which perfectly matches your skills set. My manager is looking for a web application developer who can deliver an efficient app in Java programming language with respect to industry standards. It is basically a 2 years project overall. Since you possess more than five years of experience in development environment, this should allow you to work on strong skills. Do you like to travel abroad for short duration? Because there are plenty of foreign travel chances to negotiate client’s requirements. Thus, I think, you’d love this job. All you have to do is to log in to company website www. sigmacorp. com and submit your resume under career tab. It should directly get selected as I have already refer you from my end. You’ll get an interview call sooner than you thought so be prepared. Please don’t hesitate to bug me if you have any queries regarding the job. Congratulations are in order! Best wishes, Sandip
Dear James,

How are you doing? I hope this letter finds you in
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good
health and mental peace. Based on our last discussion, I remember that how
desperately
you were looking for a job
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change
.

I am
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so
excited to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you that there is a perfect opportunity for you in my organization, which
perfectly
matches your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
set. My manager is looking for a web application developer who can deliver an efficient app in Java programming language with respect to industry standards. It is
basically
a 2 years project
overall
.

Since you possess more than five years of experience in development environment, this should
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allow
you to work on strong
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. Do you like to travel abroad for short duration?
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
there are
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plenty
of foreign travel chances to negotiate client’s requirements.
Thus
, I
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think
, you’d
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
this job.

All you
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have to
do is to log in to
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company
website
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www
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
sigmacorp
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
com
and submit your resume under career tab. It should
directly
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get
selected as I have already
Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: "referred".
refer
you from my
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end
. You’ll
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get
an interview call sooner than you
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thought
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
be prepared
.

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Please
don’t hesitate to bug me if you have any queries regarding the job. Congratulations are in order!

Best wishes,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Sandip
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS letter Your friend is searching for a job, write a letter to your friend. •Describe the details of the job•Why it is suitable for him/her•How to apply for the job. v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
208 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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