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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: what ki v.43

You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: what ki v. 43
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to request you for seeking information regarding funding of loan amount from your bank in order to finance my proposed business so that I can apply for a loan. Currently, I am employed in a reputed restaurant as a chef, As I have gathered requisite experience in this field, I am planning to commence my own restaurant business soon. In order to start such a company, I need an initial capital investment of rs1000000. Although I applied for other sources of funds as well yet managed to arrange half of the required amount, for rest of the capital outlay i. e for rs 500000 I wish to apply for loan from your bank. I request you to grant loan for 5 years so that I can easily manage the repayment of EMI amount. Also, my father will be guarantor for such sum. could you please share the information regarding raising of funds including interest rate, instalment amount and security. I would be highly greatful if you consider the same. Yours sincerely Alexa
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to request you for seeking information regarding funding of loan
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
amount
from your bank in order to finance my proposed business
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can apply for a loan.

Currently
, I
am employed
in a reputed restaurant as a chef, As I have gathered requisite experience in this field, I am planning to commence my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
restaurant business
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. In order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
such a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
, I need an initial capital investment of rs1000000. Although I applied for other sources of funds
as well
yet
managed to arrange half of the required
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
amount
, for rest of the capital outlay i. e for rs 500000 I wish to apply for loan from your bank.

I request you to grant loan for 5 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can
easily
manage the repayment of EMI
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
amount
.
Also
, my father will be guarantor for such sum.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
could
you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
share the information regarding raising of funds including interest rate,
Possible spelling mistake. 'instalment' is British English.
instalment
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
amount
and security.

I would be
highly
Possible spelling mistake found.
greatful
if you consider the same.

Yours
sincerely


Alexa
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: what ki v. 43

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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