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In many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However some people believe that better education will be a more effective solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

In many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However some people believe that better education will be a more effective solution. v. 3
In many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However, some people believe that the reduction of crime rate will be achieved more effectively through better education. I agree with this view. On the one hand, crimes caused by lack of perceptive power to distinguish both right and wrong. On the other hand, people who couldn' t control their emotion are easy committing a crime. Meanwhile, prison doesn' t solve the problem to the every roots. It is just effective in dealing with offenders in the short-term. Murders, for instance, must be imprisoned for many years and such a punishment may act as a deterrent. They know that they will face loss of freedom, social isolation and separation from their loved ones if they carry out such criminal acts. Besides, I believe that education has a better role to cope with crimes. Firstly, people should train power of discernment to gain knowledge about right and wrong. Every wrong acts have consequences. As a result, they are better prepared to avoid situations which may involve them in crime. Secondly, psychology education is an important step which helps people increase their awareness about self negative emotion may lead them to wrong behaviours. Lastly, in prison themselves, educational programmes must aim to provide prisoners with skills and qualifications to reintegrate community and find work when they are released. I consider that imprison is not the best effective weapon to fight against crimes in the long-term, and I believe that providing better education is a more essential and durable solution to reduce the crime rate.
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imprisonment is the most common solution to
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crimes
.
However
,
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some
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people
believe that the reduction of
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crime
rate will
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more
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better
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education
. I
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agree
with this view.

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crimes
caused by lack of perceptive power to distinguish both right and
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wrong
.
On the other hand
,
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people
who
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. It is
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effective in dealing with offenders in the short-term. Murders,
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,
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must
be imprisoned
for
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many
years and such a punishment may act as a deterrent. They know that they will face loss of freedom, social isolation and separation from their
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loved
ones if they carry out such criminal acts.

Besides
, I believe that
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education
has a
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better
role to cope with
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crimes
.
Firstly
,
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people
should train power of discernment to gain knowledge about right and
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wrong
. Every
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wrong
acts have consequences.
As a result
, they are
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better
prepared to avoid situations which may involve them in
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crime
.
Secondly
, psychology
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education
is an
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important
step which
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helps
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people
increase their awareness about self
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negative
emotion may lead them to
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wrong
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behaviours
.
Lastly
, in prison themselves, educational
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programmes
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must
aim to provide prisoners with
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skills
and qualifications to reintegrate community and find work when they
are released
.

I consider that imprison is not the best effective weapon to fight against
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crimes
in the long-term, and I believe that providing
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better
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education
is a more essential and durable solution to
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reduce
the
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crime
rate.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter In many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However some people believe that better education will be a more effective solution. v. 3

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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