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The chart below shows the value of one country s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016 The table show the percentage change in each category of export in 2016 compared with 2015 v.2

The chart below shows the value of one country s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016 The table show the percentage change in each category of export in 2016 compared with 2015 v. 2
The bar graph illustrates how much export profit in five kinds of products in each of the year between 2015 and 2016 while the table gives information about the difference of proportion of each product in the similar period. Overall, it is clear that the figure for petroleum products and engineered goods exported were the most popular and the changing valuation of textiles was largest. To begin, approximately 60 $ billions of petroleum product was exported, the highest-earning in the period of two years from 2015 to 2016. The figure for engineered goods exported in 2016 was over about 60 $billions, this was higher than the value in 2015. Similarly, the number of textiles exported, with 30 and 20 $ billions respectively. Looking at the table in more detail, from 2015 to 2016, the highest increase in the proportion in value was textiles, with 15. 24%. The proportion increase in values of petroleum products, engineered goods, and Agriculture products exported were 3%, 8. 5%, and 5. 18% respectively. Gems and jewellery experienced a downward trend in the value of export earning, with 5. 18%.
The bar graph illustrates how much export profit in five kinds of
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in each of the year between 2015 and 2016 while the table gives information about the difference of proportion of each
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product
in the similar period.

Overall
, it is
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that the figure for petroleum
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products
and engineered
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goods
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exported
were the most popular and the changing valuation of textiles was largest.

To
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begin
, approximately
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60 $
billions of petroleum
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product
was
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exported
, the highest-earning in the period of two years from 2015 to 2016. The figure for engineered
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goods
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exported
in 2016 was over about
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60 $
billions, this was higher than the
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in 2015.
Similarly
, the number of textiles
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exported
, with 30 and
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20 $
billions
respectively
.

Looking at the table in more detail, from 2015 to 2016, the highest increase in the proportion in
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value
was textiles, with 15. 24%. The proportion increase in values of petroleum
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products
, engineered
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goods
, and Agriculture
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products
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exported
were 3%, 8. 5%, and 5. 18%
respectively
. Gems and
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jewellery
experienced a downward trend in the
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value
of export earning, with 5. 18%.
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IELTS letter The chart below shows the value of one country s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016 The table show the percentage change in each category of export in 2016 compared with 2015 v. 2

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