Dear Jignesh,
Hi! How are you? I hope this letter finds you in a pink of health. Although it’s such a short time since we last saw each other, it feels much longer. I’m writing this letter asking for your help regarding job possibilities in your region.
Firstly, I would like to tell you that I’m exploring my opportunities to work abroad. To be honest, I’m fed up with Indian work culture specially with pathetic appreciation method so I decided to move out of country and I came to know that Canada offers several employment opportunities to immigrants. So I’m really interested to work in Canada.
I’ve very pleasant resume, which should take my task easy to land a job. Although I’ve 4 year experience in business administration, which is mostly in retaining existing clients for the company. I possess excellent understanding of business, which gave me deep insight on client’s requirement.
Furthermore, can I bug you with few more questions? Can you please tell me how are the general working hours and leave policies? Is there any variance in pay scale of outsider and local?
I look forward to hearing you soon.
Best regards,
Milan.
Dear
Jignesh
,
Hi! How are you? I hope this letter finds you in a pink of health. Although it’s such a short time since we last
saw
each other, it feels much longer. I’m writing this letter asking for your
help
regarding job possibilities in your region.
Firstly
, I would like to
tell
you that I’m exploring my opportunities to work abroad. To be honest, I’m fed up with Indian work culture
specially
with pathetic appreciation method
so
I decided to
move
out of country and I came to know that Canada offers several employment opportunities to immigrants.
So
I’m
really
interested to work in Canada.
I’ve
very
pleasant resume, which should take my task easy to land a job. Although I’ve 4 year experience in business administration, which is
mostly
in retaining existing clients for the
company
. I possess excellent understanding of business, which gave me deep insight on client’s requirement.
Furthermore
, can I bug you with few more questions? Can you
please
tell
me how are the general working hours and
leave
policies? Is there any variance in pay scale of outsider and local?
I look forward to hearing you
soon
.
Best regards,
Milan.
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