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your friend is in another country, you would like to work in that country. Ask advice for job possibilities at that country. In your letter: - say why you are looking in his/her country - what skills and work experience you have- ask some questions about s v. 2

Dear Jignesh, Hi! How are you? I hope this letter finds you in a pink of health. Although it’s such a short time since we last saw each other, it feels much longer. I’m writing this letter asking for your help regarding job possibilities in your region. Firstly, I would like to tell you that I’m exploring my opportunities to work abroad. To be honest, I’m fed up with Indian work culture specially with pathetic appreciation method so I decided to move out of country and I came to know that Canada offers several employment opportunities to immigrants. So I’m really interested to work in Canada. I’ve very pleasant resume, which should take my task easy to land a job. Although I’ve 4 year experience in business administration, which is mostly in retaining existing clients for the company. I possess excellent understanding of business, which gave me deep insight on client’s requirement. Furthermore, can I bug you with few more questions? Can you please tell me how are the general working hours and leave policies? Is there any variance in pay scale of outsider and local? I look forward to hearing you soon. Best regards, Milan.

IELTS letter your friend is in another country, you would like to work in that country. Ask advice for job possibilities at that country. In your letter: - say why you are looking in his/her country - what skills and work experience you have- ask some questions about s v.2

Dear
Jignesh
, Hi! How are you? I hope this letter finds you in a pink of health. Although it’s such a short time since we last
saw
each other, it feels much longer. I’m writing this letter asking for your
help
regarding job possibilities in your region.
Firstly
, I would like to
tell
you that I’m exploring my opportunities to work abroad. To be honest, I’m fed up with Indian work culture
specially
with pathetic appreciation method
so
I decided to
move
out of country and I came to know that Canada offers several employment opportunities to immigrants.
So
I’m
really
interested to work in Canada. I’ve
very
pleasant resume, which should take my task easy to land a job. Although I’ve 4 year experience in business administration, which is
mostly
in retaining existing clients for the
company
. I possess excellent understanding of business, which gave me deep insight on client’s requirement.
Furthermore
, can I bug you with few more questions? Can you
please
tell
me how are the general working hours and
leave
policies? Is there any variance in pay scale of outsider and local? I look forward to hearing you
soon
. Best regards, Milan.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
Letter
8 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Band score ≥ 7
  • Band score ≤ 6
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