Dear Sir,
My self Milan Desai, I am loyal resident of city council since last 10 years. I live at Park Street lane in Bradford area. I am writing this epistle to you regarding disturbance caused by construction of new lane in my neighborhood area. As I am already aware about the redevelopment plans of city council to make this place beautiful to live but it also creating a lot of inconvenience for the local residents too.
Firstly, I would like to inform you that the contractor had parked his heavy equipment just outside my front gate. Due to this, I am not able to park my car in my garage. Besides this, the construction work is going from last three months, which made it completely impossible for our children to play in the nearest garden, especially near the proposed alternative route.
I request you to speed up the construction process and I also want you to take severe actions against contractor for unnecessary delay in the project work.
I look forward to your prompt action and response in resolving the matter above.
Yours Sincerely,
Milan Desai. 
Dear Sir,
My self Milan  
Desai
, I am loyal resident of city council since last 10 years. I  
live
 at Park Street lane in Bradford area. I am writing this epistle to you regarding disturbance caused by construction of new lane in my neighborhood area. As I am already aware about the redevelopment plans of city council to  
make
 this place  
beautiful
 to  
live
  but
 it  
also
 creating  
a lot of
 inconvenience for the local residents too. 
Firstly
, I would like to inform you that the contractor had parked his heavy equipment  
just
 outside my front gate. Due to this, I am not able to park my car in my garage.  
Besides
 this, the construction work is going from last three months, which made it completely impossible for our children to play in the nearest garden,  
especially
 near the proposed alternative route.
I request you to  
speed up
 the construction process and I  
also
 want you to take severe actions against contractor for unnecessary delay in the project work.
I look forward to your prompt action and response in resolving the matter above.
Yours  
Sincerely
,
Milan  
Desai
. 
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