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Write a letter to a friend who is looking for a part time job to support his studies. In your letter- Describe the job you found for him/her- Explain why this job is good for him/her- Say what he/she needs to do to get the job v.2

Write a letter to a friend who is looking for a part time job to support his studies. In your letter- Describe the job you found for him/her- Explain why this job is good for him/her- Say what he/she needs to do to get the job v. 2
Dear Adam, How are you? I have received your e-mail about your request to find a part-time job and i am happy to tell you that i have an opportunity for you. A friend of mine that owns a Graphic Design agency told me by chance yesterday when we were dinning together that he needs a Graphic Designer as soon as possible. This position is available immediately and i am sure that this is the right position for you. The main criteria he was searching for was good abilities in sketching and illustrating storyboards, and i know that you are great in this field due to your studies in the arts University. Among all i know that you have just finished a three month course in multimedia design which is an additional skill that the agency will benefit from you. Please just confirm with an e-mail if you are interested for the position and i immediately will call Bryan to let him know. Looking forward for your response, Yours sincerely, Andi
Dear Adam,

How are you? I have received your e-mail about your request to find a part-time job and
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
am happy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you that
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
have an opportunity for you.

A friend of mine that
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owns
a Graphic Design agency
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
me by chance yesterday when we were dinning together that he needs a Graphic Designer as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. This position is available immediately and
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
am sure that this is the right position for you.

The main criteria he was searching for was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
abilities in sketching and illustrating storyboards, and
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
know that you are great in this field due to your studies in the arts University. Among all
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
know that you have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
finished a
When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "three-month"
three month
course in multimedia design which is an additional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
that the agency will benefit from you.

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Please
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just
confirm with an e-mail if you are
The usual collocation for "interested" is "in" not "for". Did you mean "interested in"?
interested for
the position and
Did you mean "I"?
i
immediately will call Bryan to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
him know.

Looking forward for your response,

Yours
sincerely
,

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Andi
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS letter Write a letter to a friend who is looking for a part time job to support his studies. In your letter- Describe the job you found for him/her- Explain why this job is good for him/her- Say what he/she needs to do to get the job v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
170 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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