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Your friend is about to celebrate a landmark birthday and would welcome suggestions as to how is should be celebrated. Write a letter to your friend. Say what type of party should be held e. g themed, fancy dress, black tie eventSuggest a suitable venueMake re v.2

Your friend is about to celebrate a landmark birthday and would welcome suggestions as to how is should be celebrated. Write a letter to your friend. Say what type of party should be held e. g themed, fancy dress, black tie eventSuggest a suitable venueMake re v. 2
Dear John Wishing you many happy birthday in advance! I am writing this missive to offer you some suggestion to make your special day more memorable. As you are going to enter on teenage, so, I would like to suggest to go for an themed party as our friend circle never had one and also give your party a unique taste. Ranjit-Avenue' s Bombay house is thr best place to have one such kind of party as their staff are well trained in their job and prices are also very reasonable. Having Dj aftrr some snacks will also give you respect in our friend circle, as dancing with girls will open up you asbteenager little bit and making your dream come true, so, planning to have Dj in your party is mandatory requirment. I hope we will have blast in your party, waiting for your call. Yours truly Anand
Dear John

Wishing you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
happy birthday in advance!

I am writing this missive to offer you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
suggestion to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
your special day more memorable.

As you are going to enter on teenage,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, I would like to
The verb 'suggest' is used with the gerund form: "suggest going".
suggest to go
for
Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
an
themed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
as our friend circle never had one and
also
give your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
a unique taste.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Ranjit-Avenue&
#039; s Bombay
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
is
A determiner is probably missing here: "thr the best".
thr best
place to have one such kind of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
as their staff are
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well trained
in their job and prices are
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
reasonable.

Having
Possible spelling mistake found.
Dj
Possible spelling mistake found.
aftrr
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
snacks will
also
give you respect in our friend circle, as dancing with girls will open up you
Possible spelling mistake found.
asbteenager
Reduce redundancy by using "little" or "bit".
little bit
and making your dream
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
true,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, planning to have
Possible spelling mistake found.
Dj
in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
is mandatory
Possible spelling mistake found.
requirment
.

I hope we will have blast in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
, waiting for your call.

Yours
truly


Anand
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS letter Your friend is about to celebrate a landmark birthday and would welcome suggestions as to how is should be celebrated. Write a letter to your friend. Say what type of party should be held e. g themed, fancy dress, black tie eventSuggest a suitable venueMake re v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
148 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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