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You have organised 90th birthday party of your relative and invited elderly guests also. It was a successful party. Write a letter to the hotel manager, to provide the feedback: In your letter, you should tell: • when the party was • why it was s v.2

You have organised 90th birthday party of your relative and invited elderly guests also. It was a successful party. Write a letter to the hotel manager, to provide the feedback: In your letter, you should tell: • when the party was • why it was s v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to you as an appreciation because your hotel helped me a lot to organise 90th birthday for my grandmother. We had a reservation last weekend and birthday party itself was on Saturday but we stayed for extra night to rest and had a wonderful day at a beach. Birthday party was a wonderful and food especially dessert was amazing. We decorated the auditorium with her favourite flowers and also organise a slide show to show early years of her life before she become wonderful mother and grandmother for her grandchildren. She was on tears a lot but we also have a lot of good laughs and had a delightful time together. I would like to thank Mr Martin Blue who helped me to put up a slide show because I really struggled with it and my computer did not want to show it on a screen. Martin had an excellent solution for these kind of emergencies and it helped me a lot. Thank you again for a lovely weekend I would recommend your hotel for these kind of events 100%. Yours faithfully Jane Green
Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing to you as an appreciation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
your hotel
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
me a lot to
Possible spelling mistake. 'organise' is British English.
organise
90th birthday for my grandmother.

We had a reservation last weekend and birthday party itself was on Saturday
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
we stayed for extra night to rest and had a wonderful day at a beach. Birthday party was a wonderful and food
especially
dessert was amazing.

We decorated the auditorium with her
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
flowers and
also
Possible spelling mistake. 'organise' is British English.
organise
a slide
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
show
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
show
early years of her life
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
she become wonderful mother and grandmother for her grandchildren. She was on tears a lot
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
we
also
have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
laughs and had a delightful time together.

I would like to thank Mr Martin Blue who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
me to put up a slide
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
show
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I
really
struggled with it and my computer did not want to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
show
it on a screen. Martin had an excellent solution for
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of emergencies and it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
me a lot.

Thank you again for a lovely weekend I would recommend your hotel for
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
100%.

Yours
faithfully


Jane Green
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter You have organised 90th birthday party of your relative and invited elderly guests also. It was a successful party. Write a letter to the hotel manager, to provide the feedback: In your letter, you should tell: • when the party was • why it was s v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
188 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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