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You are staying in rented accommodation. You recently held a party to celebrate your birthday. Several neighbours have complained about the noise to your landlord. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter: apologize for the disturbance explain v.2

You are staying in rented accommodation. You recently held a party to celebrate your birthday. Several neighbours have complained about the noise to your landlord. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter: apologize for the disturbance explain v. 2
Dear John, I am writing to apologize from you about the party that it is held on 27th November. I already know, my neighbors are complained to you about some noises in your own house area. Actually, it is a big party which was arranged my family for me. They are invited to the 40 people to celebrate my party. Therefore in my house are so many crowded and also we arrange events for children and adults such as musical chair game and so on. Furthermore, after the event, we arrange DJ music for adults to enjoy the night. Unfortunately, the party was ended after the midnight. Finally, I really upset for this situation because you have to face any trouble from my neighbors. Therefore I decided to get apologize from all my neighbors as personally. Once again I would like to say sorry and I promise you I will never arrange the night party at your place Thanks Yours sincerely mohan
Dear John,

I am writing to apologize from you about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
that it
is held
on 27th November. I already know, my neighbors
are complained
to you about
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some
noises in your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
area.

Actually, it is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
which
was arranged
my family for me. They
are invited
to the 40
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to celebrate my
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party
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
in my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
crowded and
also
we arrange
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
for children and adults such as musical chair game and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.
Furthermore
, after the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
, we arrange DJ music for adults to enjoy the night. Unfortunately, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
was ended
after the midnight.

Finally
, I
really
upset for this situation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
face any trouble from my neighbors.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
I decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
apologize from all my neighbors as
personally
.

Once again I would like to say sorry and I promise you I will never arrange the night
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
at your place

Thanks

Yours
sincerely


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mohan
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You are staying in rented accommodation. You recently held a party to celebrate your birthday. Several neighbours have complained about the noise to your landlord. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter: apologize for the disturbance explain v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
161 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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