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You planned to throw a surprise party for your father on his 60th birthday. Write a letter to your aunt, in your letter, write-•Invite her to the surprise party•Explain why this party means a lot to you•Say what you want to bring with her v.2

You planned to throw a surprise party for your father on his 60th birthday. Write a letter to your aunt, in your letter, write-•Invite her to the surprise party•Explain why this party means a lot to you•Say what you want to bring with her v. 2
Dear Aunt Molly, Hope you receive this letter in the best of your health. I am sure you might be aware of the fact that dad is turning 60 next week. I am planning a surprise party for him, since, none of our festivities are complete without you, therefore I am inviting and informing you well in advance, so that you do not miss the celebration. Moreover, your knowledge of event organization will make the day more manageable. I am excited about the event and want to make it a memorable one for him. Besides, this would be a way to thank him for his never ending support and being a great friend. Additionally, this might be one of the few chances going forward, that I can spend time with him, considering that fact that soon I will be migrating to Australia for work. The fact cannot be denied that you and dad share a special bond, so can I request you to bring some old photographs of your childhood and college days. I had an idea of running a short film for him during the evening party, besides present it as a souvenir to him. Last but not the least, will it be possible for you to bring your hand-make cookies, he enjoys them during breakfast. Looking forward seeing you. Best Wishes, Alex
Dear Aunt Molly,

Hope you receive this letter in the best of your health. I am sure you might be aware of the fact that dad is turning 60
next
week.

I am planning a surprise party for him, since, none of our festivities are complete without you,
therefore
I am inviting and informing you well in advance,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that you do not miss the celebration.
Moreover
, your knowledge of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
organization will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the day more manageable.

I
am excited
about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
and want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it a memorable one for him.
Besides
, this would be a way to thank him for his never ending support and being a great friend.
Additionally
, this might be one of the few chances going forward, that I can spend time with him, considering that fact that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
I will be migrating to Australia for work.

The fact cannot
be denied
that you and dad share a special bond,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
can I request you to bring
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
photographs of your childhood and college days. I had an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of running a short film for him during the evening party,
besides
present it as a souvenir to him. Last
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not the least, will it be possible for you to bring your hand-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
cookies, he enjoys them during breakfast.

Looking forward seeing you.

Best Wishes,

Alex
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS letter You planned to throw a surprise party for your father on his 60th birthday. Write a letter to your aunt, in your letter, write-•Invite her to the surprise party•Explain why this party means a lot to you•Say what you want to bring with her v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
223 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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