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You have decided to do course abroad. Your friend lives in the same city where you plan to study. Write to your friend explaining academic profile and expectations from course and University you have aimed for. Inquire all options of studying from herIn yo v.2

You have decided to do course abroad. Your friend lives in the same city where you plan to study. Write to your friend explaining academic profile and expectations from course and University you have aimed for. Inquire all options of studying from herIn yo v. 2
Hi Grace, How are you? I am fine. Hope your studies are going well. I apologise as I was unable to be in touch with you by mail or chat, as i was held up with final exams. As you are aware, we are planning to move to Toronto next month. I have completed my eleventh grade in computer science group. This year I would be in twelfth grade. I have analysed few schools and found lady Violet, Bell master to be the best in Toronto for computer area. Also, understood from students in website review that there are additional coaching available for final year. Got to know that most school require student to be aware of French language also. Schoolmates talk both in French and English in school. So I have applied for spoken french language class here in India. Please advice on the schools and University that you are aware and best teaching in area of computer science. Also please suggest me with best school in Ottawa or Toronto area. Thank you Yours lovingly, Neethu
Hi Grace,

How are you? I am fine. Hope your studies are going well. I
Possible spelling mistake. 'apologise' is British English.
apologise
as I was unable to be in touch with you by mail or chat, as
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
was held
up with final exams.

As you are aware, we are planning to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to Toronto
next
month. I have completed my eleventh grade in computer science group. This year I would be in twelfth grade.

I have
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analysed
few
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
and found lady Violet, Bell master to be the best in Toronto for computer area.
Also
, understood from students in website review that there are additional coaching available for final year.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Got
to know that most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
require student to be aware of French language
also
. Schoolmates talk both in French and English in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
.
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So
I have applied for spoken
"French" needs to be capitalized when not used as a verb.
french
language
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class
here in India.

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Please
advice on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
and University that you are aware and best teaching in area of computer science.

Also
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please
suggest me
A determiner is probably missing here: "with the best".
with best
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
in Ottawa or Toronto area.

Thank you

Yours
lovingly
,

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Neethu
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5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS letter You have decided to do course abroad. Your friend lives in the same city where you plan to study. Write to your friend explaining academic profile and expectations from course and University you have aimed for. Inquire all options of studying from herIn yo v. 2

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176 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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