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Your company has decided to organise a training course for the employees at a local Convention centre. They have asked you to contact the manager of the local Convention CentreWrite a letter to the manager of local to national Centre-explain the trailer f v.2

Your company has decided to organise a training course for the employees at a local Convention centre. They have asked you to contact the manager of the local Convention CentreWrite a letter to the manager of local to national Centre-explain the trailer f v. 2
Dear Sir I am a native dweller of Noida who works in HCL company from last five years. The purpose of mind to penning down this epistle is to take your grant to organise a training course at your local conventional Centre. The organisation of mine take a decision to organise a training course on " JAVA" language and they want to do it at your renowned and well furnished centre. It is computer language course and help employs to make their websites more eye-catching and effective. Moreover learning java will beneficial for both individual growth as well as organisation growth which will be helpful in acquire the break-throughs in the future. The course might be usher on first march which will take 20 days to complete. I would like to tell you some possession which will use in during the course. As, it is computer language courses so, computers or laptops are the dire need to run it. Moreover, the air conditioner System will work properly, and the infrastructure must become for table such as chairs and tables etcetera. So, that no one can face any type of hurdle in between the training. Further more, I would also like to know about the facilities which you have in your conventional centres such as drinking water, parking system facilities etcetera. I would be very grateful if you gave me the consent and other details as early as possible so that I could able to pass the information to my employer. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully Aman
Dear Sir

I am a native dweller of Noida who works in HCL
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company
from last five years. The purpose of mind to penning down this epistle is to take your grant to
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organise
a training
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course
at your local conventional
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Centre
.

The
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organisation
of mine take a decision to
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organise
a training
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course
on
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&quot
;
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JAVA&quot
;
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language and
they want to do it at your renowned and well furnished
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centre
. It is computer language
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course
and
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help
employs to
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make
their websites more eye-catching and effective.
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Moreover
learning java will beneficial for both individual growth
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as well as
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organisation
growth which will be helpful in acquire the
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break-throughs
in the future. The
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course
might be
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usher
on
first
march which will take 20 days to complete.

I would like to
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tell
you
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some
possession which will
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use
in during the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
. As, it is computer language
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courses
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so
, computers or laptops are the dire need to run it.
Moreover
, the air conditioner System will work
properly
, and the infrastructure
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
become for table such as chairs and tables etcetera.
“So , that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
So, that
no one can face any type of hurdle in between the training.
Further
more, I would
also
like to know about the facilities which you have in your conventional
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centres
such as drinking water, parking system facilities etcetera.

I would be
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very
grateful if you gave me the consent and other
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details
as early as possible
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so
that I
Did you mean "could be able"?
could able
to pass the information to my employer.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully


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Aman
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your company has decided to organise a training course for the employees at a local Convention centre. They have asked you to contact the manager of the local Convention CentreWrite a letter to the manager of local to national Centre-explain the trailer f v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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