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Your brother cannot come on a trip that you planned Write a letter to your friend inviting him her to join instead Please say Where and when do you plan to go Why can t your brother come Give a short description of the trip v.2

Your brother cannot come on a trip that you planned Write a letter to your friend inviting him her to join instead Please say Where and when do you plan to go Why can t your brother come Give a short description of the trip v. 2
Hi John, I trust you must be doing good. I and my brother Kish were planning to visit Goa in the third week of August. However, due to unexpected circumstances, Kishore is not able to join me. So, I was thinking why can' t you and I go for this amazing planned trip to Goa. It' s my 25th birthday on 18 August. We were planning to book tickets of train on the 17th evening so that we can reach Goa next day early morning and celebrate my special day there. There is one special train from Surat which starts at 8 pm on Thursday evening and will reach Goa next day early morning. Kilgore has recently joined KCMG. He was planning to take a leave on Friday and enjoy a weekend with me at Goa and then resume back office on Monday, but unfortunately, he has to travel western zone with his manager for the quarterly sales meeting. Having joined the organization recently, taking leave is not possible for him; ergo, I was thinking why can' t you and I go for a trip that we were planning from such a long time. Talking about the things that I have planned to do in Goa are water sports activities, visiting sunset point and trying our luck in the famous " Delta In" casino. Moreover, I also was thinking to visit south Goa to have a look at the artificial dock that state government has developed recently. I hope you will be able to join me on this wonderfully planned trip to Goa. Waiting for your reply. Best regards Mayor Patel.
Hi John,

I trust you
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good
. I and my brother
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Kish
were
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to visit Goa in the third week of August.
However
, due to unexpected circumstances,
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Kishore
is not able to
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join
me.
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, I was thinking why
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can&
#039; t you and I go for this amazing planned trip to Goa.

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#039; s my 25th birthday on 18 August. We were
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planning
to book tickets of train on the 17th evening
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so
that we can reach Goa
next
day early morning and celebrate my special day there. There is one special train from Surat which
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starts
at 8 pm on Thursday evening and will reach Goa
next
day early morning.

Kilgore has recently
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joined
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KCMG
. He was
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planning
to take a
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leave
on Friday and enjoy a weekend with me at Goa and then resume back office on Monday,
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but
unfortunately, he
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has to
travel western zone with his manager for the quarterly sales meeting. Having
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joined
the organization recently, taking
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leave
is not possible for him; ergo, I was thinking why
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can&
#039; t you and I go for a trip that we were
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planning
from such a long time.

Talking about the things that I have planned to do in Goa are water sports activities, visiting sunset point and trying our luck in the
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famous
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&quot
; Delta
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In&quot
; casino.
Moreover
, I
also
was thinking to visit south Goa to have a look at the artificial dock that state
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government
has developed recently.

I hope you will be able to
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join
me on this
wonderfully
planned trip to Goa.

Waiting for your reply.

Best regards

Mayor Patel.
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS letter Your brother cannot come on a trip that you planned Write a letter to your friend inviting him her to join instead Please say Where and when do you plan to go Why can t your brother come Give a short description of the trip v. 2

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