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You work for an international company You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job Write a letter to your manager In your letter Describe the training course you want to do Explain what the company could do to hel v.2

You work for an international company You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job Write a letter to your manager In your letter Describe the training course you want to do Explain what the company could do to hel v. 2
Dear Sir, I’m writing to inform you about an IT training course which is will be provided by a local university. This course is totally free, because university tutors want to help their students, but its open for all inhabitants of our city. This course includes a lot of different chapters of internet technology and it is very useful for beginners. This course will be held on Mondays and Fridays from 8 a. m. till 2 p. m. I want you to let me visit it, because it would be very profitable for our company. You just need to exempt me from my duties for that time. As I know, there is now one specialist in our company that can create and edit a new internet web-site. For these purposes our company compelled every time ask strange organizations. As a result, these organizations demand a good deal of payment for their services, as we don’t have another choice. Instead of this, we would be able to maintain our web-site by us. Thank you in advance for considering my proposition, I’m looking forward to hearing from you. Kind regards, Givi Login
Dear Sir,

I’m writing to inform you about an IT training
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its open for all inhabitants of our city. This
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includes
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a lot of
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different
chapters of internet technology and it is
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very
useful for beginners.

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This
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course
will
be held
on Mondays and Fridays from 8 a. m. till 2 p. m. I want you to
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let
me visit it,
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because
it would be
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very
profitable for our
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company
. You
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just
need to exempt me from my duties for that time.

As I know, there is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
one specialist in our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
that can create and edit a new internet web-site. For these purposes our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
compelled every time ask strange organizations.
As a result
, these organizations demand a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
deal of payment for their services, as we don’t have another choice.
Instead
of this, we would be able to maintain our web-site by us.

Thank you in advance for considering my proposition, I’m looking forward to hearing from you.

Kind regards,

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Givi
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS letter You work for an international company You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job Write a letter to your manager In your letter Describe the training course you want to do Explain what the company could do to hel v. 2

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7 paragraphs
189 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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