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You would like to invite before and friend to visit you for your birthday write a letter inviting your friends Tell your friend about your birthdayExplain how much the visit would mean to youSuggest that your friend stays at your house for the visit v.2

You would like to invite before and friend to visit you for your birthday write a letter inviting your friends Tell your friend about your birthdayExplain how much the visit would mean to youSuggest that your friend stays at your house for the visit v. 2
Dear John Hi! how are you? I am fine and hope you are also sailing on the same boat. I am penning down this missive to invite you on my birthday party. As I completed my 24 ears of the life and it would be my 25th birthday which I intend to celebrate. It has been a long time to meet all the friends. Indeed, this is the reason of my birthday celebration. I organised a grand party and I invited all our college friends on my birthday party so it is a great opportunity to meet all of them And once again, we would do a lots of fun together and you will definitely come, I do not want to hear any excuse because you are my best friend and if you would not come then your absence would spoil my birthday. In addition, all the friends will stayed at my home and you will also stayed at my home but not only for that day, you will visit here for three to four days so that we can create lots of memories and I will take you from the airport, you just tell me when you will come? There are many good places to visit in my country which we would definitely visit. Pay my regards to your family and I am waiting of your prompt reply. Your truly Aman
Dear John

Hi!
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how
are you? I am fine and hope you are
also
sailing on the same boat. I am penning down this missive to invite you on my birthday party.

As I completed my 24 ears of the life and it would be my 25th birthday which I intend to celebrate. It has been a long time to
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meet
all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
.
Indeed
, this is the reason of my birthday celebration. I
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organised
a grand party and I invited all our college
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friends
on my birthday party
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so
it is a great opportunity to
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meet
all of them And once again, we would do
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a lots
of fun together and you will definitely
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come
, I do not want to hear any excuse
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because
you are my best
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friend
and if you would not
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come
then your absence would spoil my birthday.

In addition
, all the
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friends
will stayed at my home and you will
also
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "stay"
stayed
at my home
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but
not
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only
for that day, you will visit here for three to four days
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so
that we can create lots of memories and I will take you from the airport, you
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just
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tell
me when you will
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come
? There are
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many
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good
places to visit in my country which we would definitely visit.

Pay my regards to your
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
family and
I am waiting of your prompt reply.

Your
truly


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Aman
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You would like to invite before and friend to visit you for your birthday write a letter inviting your friends Tell your friend about your birthdayExplain how much the visit would mean to youSuggest that your friend stays at your house for the visit v. 2

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  American English
7 paragraphs
231 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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