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Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. Write a letter to the director of the school. In your letter, e v.6

Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. Write a letter to the director of the school. In your letter, e v. 6
Dear Sir, My name is Truong Nguyen, who was a student of Sydney College of Australia. For your information, I had finished a presentation skill course before I graduated last year. At the moment, I have applied for a new job and the Human Resources Department has required some copies of my reports and assignments. Therefore, I am writing this letter in regard to asking for the related paperwork. All needed documents will be listed below: - Two copies of my final assignments. - Two copies of my performance analysis written by my mentor, Mr. Johnson. - One copy of my certificate. My company demands to provide these documents on 25th April. Therefore, I will be grateful if you approve my request as soon as possible. Furthermore, I am willing to pay for any additional fee in order to get these copies quicker. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Truong Nguyen.
Dear Sir,

My name is
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Truong
Nguyen, who was a student of Sydney College of Australia. For your information, I had finished a presentation
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skill
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before
I graduated last year. At the moment, I have applied for a new job and the Human Resources Department has required
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some
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copies
of my reports and assignments.
Therefore
, I am writing this letter in regard to asking for the related paperwork. All needed documents will
be listed
below:

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Two
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copies
of my final assignments.

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Two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
copies
of my performance analysis written by my mentor, Mr. Johnson.

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One
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copy
of my certificate.

My
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company
demands to provide these documents on 25th April.
Therefore
, I will be grateful if you approve my request as
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soon
as possible.
Furthermore
, I am willing to pay for any additional fee in order to
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get
these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
copies
quicker.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely
,

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IELTS letter Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. Write a letter to the director of the school. In your letter, e v. 6

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
155 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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