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Your child’s school has arranged a trip abroad for students. The principal of the school asked some parents to join the trip to help. Write to the school principle and say– Why do you want to join the trip? – How could you help during the trip? – As v.2

Your child’s school has arranged a trip abroad for students. The principal of the school asked some parents to join the trip to help. Write to the school principle and say– Why do you want to join the trip? – How could you help during the trip? – As v. 2
Dear sir, My son Jacob Hill, who is in 1st grade mentioned to me yesterday that a travel trip to another country has been organized by the school for students in which their parents can also show interest to join with them. Without having a second thought, i compelled myself to write to you to consider myself to come along with the students on this trip. I would like to explain that as this travel plan includes visiting different historical places of ' London' , i am also quite anxious to watch the ' Roman architect' of constructing buildings along with some tourist places. Moreover, during this visit i would also get a chance to learn about ancient art and culture as there are many museums possess such kinds of objects from all over the world. i would also like to acknowledge that i have volunteered several times in summer camps for children arranged in many parts of our country with ' Helps Welfare Society' . Hence, i acquire some relevant experience to arrange everything for children on such kind of events. I believe that, my presence on this tour could be very fruitful for all the students. It would be great if you could answer some of my question regarding this abroad travel. Firstly, how long the tour will be and what kind of living arrangements are made for accommodating everyone? Secondly, i would like to learn about the expenses incurred for each person on this vacation so that i can arrange finances accordingly. Finally, the list of places planned to be visited and requirement of any special clothing suitable for the climate of the country. I hope it will not cause any inconvenience to you. I will look forward for your prompt response. Yours sincerely, Stephen Hill
Dear sir,

My son Jacob Hill, who is in 1st grade mentioned to me yesterday that a travel trip to another country has
been organized
by the school for students in which their parents can
also
show
interest to
join
with them. Without having a second
thought
,
i
compelled myself to write to you to consider myself to
come
along with the students on this trip.

I would like to
explain
that as this travel plan includes visiting
different
historical places of '
London&
#039;
,
i
am
also
quite anxious to
watch
the ' Roman
architect&
#039; of constructing buildings along with
some
tourist places.
Moreover
, during this visit
i
would
also
get
a chance to learn about ancient art and culture as there are
many
museums possess such kinds of objects from all over the world.

i
would
also
like to acknowledge that
i
have volunteered several times in summer camps for children arranged in
many
parts of our country with '
Helps
Welfare
Society&
#039;
.
Hence
,
i
acquire
some
relevant experience to arrange everything for children on such kind of
events
. I believe that, my presence on this tour could be
very
fruitful for all the students.

It would be great if you could answer
some
of my question regarding this abroad travel.
Firstly
, how long the tour will be and what kind of living arrangements
are made
for accommodating everyone?
Secondly
,
i
would like to learn about the expenses incurred for each person on this vacation
so
that
i
can arrange finances
accordingly
.
Finally
, the list of places planned to
be visited
and requirement of any special clothing suitable for the climate of the country. I hope it will not cause any inconvenience to you.

I will look forward for your prompt response.

Yours
sincerely
,

Stephen Hill
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your child’s school has arranged a trip abroad for students. The principal of the school asked some parents to join the trip to help. Write to the school principle and say– Why do you want to join the trip? – How could you help during the trip? – As v. 2

Letter
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298 words
6.0
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