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Your car is hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. v.4

Your car is hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I have hired a Toyota Altis car on 17th August from your head office located at Serangoon, for a period of 15 days. The registration number of the car is SGT 2345D. I am writing to inform you that I have been involved in a minor accident earlier today that caused some damages to the car. I was on my way to my office and at the Raffle city junction, a car from the opposite direction tried to cross the signal when it was red. Due to his rash driving, his vehicle slightly touched the right side of my car. I tried my best to avoid it, but could not help much. The driver side's rear-view mirror broke and also led to some scratches on the right side of the car. I reported the incident to the on-duty police and he lodged a complain and informed the other driver's insurance company. I am attaching the police report to this letter so that you can review what really happened and claim the insurance for the repair costs. But I replaced the rearview mirror from the service station as it is very necessary for driving. I am ready to cooperate regarding this and if you need any further information, I am available at 98765678. Yours faithfully, Ankit Gupta
Dear Sir or Madam,

I have hired a Toyota
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Altis
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car
on 17th August from your head office located at
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Serangoon
, for a period of 15 days. The registration number of the
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car
is SGT 2345D. I am writing to inform you that I have
been involved
in a minor accident earlier
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today
that caused
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some
damages to the car.

I was on my way to my office and at the Raffle city junction, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
from the opposite direction tried to cross the signal when it
was red
. Due to his rash driving, his vehicle
slightly
touched the right side of my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
. I tried my best to avoid it,
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but
could not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
much. The driver side's rear-view mirror broke and
also
led to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
scratches on the right side of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
. I reported the incident to the on-duty
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police and
he lodged a
The word 'complain' is a verb. Did you mean the noun "complaint"?
complain
and informed the other driver's insurance
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company
.

I am attaching the police report to this letter
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so
that you can review what
really
happened and claim the insurance for the repair costs.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
I replaced the rearview mirror from the service station as it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
necessary for driving.

I am ready to cooperate regarding this and if you need any
further
information, I am available at 98765678.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ankit Gupta
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your car is hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
219 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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