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Write a letter to the company. In your letter, you need to explain the following: Your car is hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. when and where v.2

Write a letter to the company. In your letter, you need to explain the following: Your car is hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. when and where v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam. I am writing in express to sincerely apologize for the situation I met with during my vacation. I had lease a car from the management for a couple of weeks but unfortunately, it caused damage to the company property due to the accident occurred while my trip. To be more specific, On the last day of weekday in the office on 27 August I signed a writing, with consents of the team management of leasing the vehicle of the company until 15 September. Besides, the terms and conditions of gas, any repair and cost of damage was slightly on me with written agreement. Unluckily, when we were arriving back on the way a gigantic truck was unable to made a wide turn and ultimately hit an angle of its back upon the car. Simultaneously, I was unable to had contact with truck driver as I was in his blind spot. Although, the truck driver can see but his vision was glared by the sunshine. As a result, the collision occurred between both party. Blissfully, we got only minor injuries during the major shock but the car was tore out as well as tires were also blown at the same time. Likewise, there are many scratches on the body of the car. So, we called the police meanwhile the ambulance rushed spontaneously. At last, the truck driver agreed that was his mistake as well as I had also made a mistake so we both partially agreed for the cause of the loss. The car was pulled away right away to the car agency for the maintenance and all the cost was incurred by the truck driver. I feel sincere apology again for the damage of the property of the company. Yours faithfully, Jasmine.
Dear Sir or Madam.

I am writing in express to
sincerely
apologize for the situation I met with during my vacation. I had lease a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
from the management for a couple of weeks
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
unfortunately, it caused damage to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
property due to the accident occurred while my trip.

To be more specific, On the last day of weekday in the office on 27 August I signed a writing, with consents of the team management of leasing the vehicle of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
until 15 September.
Besides
, the terms and conditions of gas, any repair and cost of damage was
slightly
on me with written agreement.

Unluckily
, when we were arriving back on the way a gigantic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
truck
was unable
Did you mean "to make"?
to made
a wide turn and
ultimately
hit an angle of its back upon the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
.
Simultaneously
, I was unable to had contact with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
truck
driver as I was in his blind spot. Although, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
truck
driver can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
his vision
was glared
by the sunshine.
As a result
, the collision occurred between both party.
Blissfully
, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
minor injuries during the major shock
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
was
Consider using a past participle here: "torn".
tore
out
as well
as tires were
also
blown at the same time.
Likewise
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
scratches on the body of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, we called the police meanwhile the ambulance rushed
spontaneously
.

At last, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
truck
driver
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
that was his mistake
as well
as I had
also
made a mistake
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
we both
partially
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
for the cause of the loss. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
was pulled
away right away to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
agency for the maintenance and all the cost
was incurred
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
truck
driver.

I feel sincere apology again for the
The usual collocation for word "damage" is "to" not "of." Revise: "damage to".
damage of
the property of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jasmine.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter Write a letter to the company. In your letter, you need to explain the following: Your car is hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. when and where v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
296 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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