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Your car is hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. v.2

Your car is hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently rented a Maruti Suzuki Alto car from your company and let me tell you, you have some world-class employees working with you. The quality of the vehicle was top-notch and you provide an impressive service as per my experience. I hired this car a week ago from your Chandigarh office. However, it is a regret that an accident spoiled both my holiday and spirit and caused some damages to the car. I was driving to Kalka station from Chandigarh to pick one of my friends from the railway station when a small accident took place. I was standing at the red light when suddenly another car coming at a very high speed hit my vehicle from behind, leaving the bumper and the silencer of the car somewhat broken. A police officer on duty has lodged an FIR against the other driver, and after checking all the essential documents, he has advised the other driver to bear all the charges for the repairing and servicing of the car. I have reserved this vehicle till 14th March and require it for some important tasks. Hence I sincerely request you to arrange another car for me. I shall be very thankful to you. Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply soon. Yours faithfully, Pooja Gupta
Dear Sir or Madam,

I have recently rented a
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Maruti
Suzuki Alto
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car
from your
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company
and
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let
me
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tell
you, you have
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some
world-
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class
employees working with you. The quality of the vehicle was top-notch and you provide an impressive service as per my experience. I hired this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
a week ago from your Chandigarh office.
However
, it is a regret that an accident spoiled both my holiday and spirit and caused
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some
damages to the car.

I was driving to
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Kalka
station from Chandigarh to pick one of my friends from the railway station when a
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small
accident took place. I was standing at the red light when
suddenly
another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
coming at a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
high speed hit my vehicle from behind, leaving the bumper and the silencer of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
somewhat broken.

A police officer on duty has lodged an FIR against the other driver, and after checking all the essential documents, he has advised the other driver to bear all the charges for the repairing and servicing of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
. I have reserved this vehicle till 14th March and require it for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
tasks.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
I
sincerely
request you to arrange another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
for me. I shall be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
thankful to you.

Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Pooja
Gupta
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter Your car is hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
226 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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