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Your car is hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. v.3

Your car is hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I hired a Maruti Swift Car (Registration Number: MP07 5234) from your city centre outlet, Bangalore, on 12th September for a duration of four days. I am writing to apprise you of a minor accident that involved that car. I am hoping you would take necessary actions regarding this. I have hired this car for a family holiday in Mysore, but unfortunately, the automobile was involved in a small accident yesterday. As it was dark and in the absence of street light, I could not notice an open and large pothole on the road on time and applied the brake suddenly. Due to this, the car behind collided with my car. Although there was no major damage, only the light on the left-hand side was broken and had a small dent. Though I have got the light and dent fixed at a Maruti authorised service station, but the small scratches are still visible. Please accept my sincere apologies. I am willing to pay some extra charges as compensation if required. You can send me the final bill to my address and I shall clear all dues within next week. Please feel free to call me, in case any further information is required. Thank you in advance. Yours faithfully, Preeti Ghuraiya
Dear Sir or Madam,

I hired a
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Maruti
Swift
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Car
(Registration Number: MP07 5234) from your city
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centre
outlet, Bangalore, on 12th September for a duration of four days. I am writing to apprise you of a minor accident that involved that
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car
.
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I
am hoping you would take necessary actions regarding this.

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I
have hired this
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car
for a family holiday in Mysore,
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but
unfortunately, the automobile
was involved
in a
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small
accident yesterday. As it was dark and in the absence of street light, I could not notice an open and large pothole on the road on time and applied the brake
suddenly
. Due to this, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
behind collided with my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
. Although there was no major damage,
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only
the light on the
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left
-hand side
was broken
and had a
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small
dent.

Though I have
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got
the light and dent
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fixed
at a
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Maruti
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authorised
service station,
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but
the
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small
scratches are
still
visible.
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Please
accept my sincere apologies. I am willing to pay
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some
extra charges as compensation if required. You can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me the final bill to my address and I shall
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clear
all dues within
next
week.

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Please
feel free to call me, in case any
further
information
is required
.

Thank you in advance.

Yours
faithfully
,

Preeti
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Ghuraiya
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter Your car is hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. v. 3

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
213 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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