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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v.7

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v. 7
Dear Sir or Madam, I am very excited about the seminar on "Risk Management in Financial Industry" that will be organised by you in Edinburgh, United Kingdom. However, the information, that I received from the advert in a local newspaper, does not include the dates, program outlines, accommodation plan and the cost. I currently work in a financial institution in Italy and have spent over 5 years in the Risk Management sector. Thus the seminar will be immensely useful to me in facing current risk management issues. I am hoping that you would give me further details about the seminar. Firstly, please provide me with the actual date and agenda of the workshop with the detailed program structure. Are there any prerequisites to attend it? Secondly, what would be the cost to book the seat and what international payment methods are accepted? Lastly, will you handle the hotel booking for the international participants? If so, what would be the approximate cost? Thank you in advance. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Cyril Chinkata
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am
very
excited about the seminar on
"
Risk
Management in Financial Industry
"
that will be
organised
by you in Edinburgh, United Kingdom.
However
, the information, that I received from the advert in a local newspaper, does not include the dates, program outlines, accommodation plan and the cost.

I
currently
work in a financial institution in Italy and have spent over 5 years in the
Risk
Management sector.
Thus
the seminar will be
immensely
useful to me in facing
current
risk
management issues. I am hoping that you would give me
further
details
about the seminar.

Firstly
,
please
provide me with the actual date and agenda of the workshop with the detailed program structure. Are there any prerequisites to attend it?
Secondly
, what would be the cost to book the seat and what international payment methods are
accepted
?
Lastly
, will you handle the hotel booking for the international participants? If
so
, what would be the approximate cost?

Thank you in advance. I am looking forward to hearing from you
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Cyril
Chinkata
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v. 7

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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