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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v.3

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request some information regarding the conference that your organisation is going to conduct next month in Perth Australia, as advertised in the Daily Heralds. I am hoping that you would provide me with these details as soon as possible so that I can book my seat for the workshop. First off, I would like to know the exact schedule of the symposium to sanction the leaves from my work. Is there any prerequisite to attend the conclave? If so, what are they? Secondly, the venue details with a navigational map would be highly appreciated as I will be travelling to Perth for the first time. Are the participants expected to bring their personal laptop and other stationery? Finally, who would be responsible for the accommodation - the participants themselves or your organisation? Can I book a hotel of my own? What will be the total cost for a participant from the UK and if there is an early bird discount provided that booking is done well in advance? I am hoping to receive your reply before next Friday. Your help and time will be greatly appreciated. Yours faithfully, Dev Odedra
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to request
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some
information regarding the conference that your
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organisation
is going to conduct
next
month in Perth Australia, as advertised in the Daily Heralds. I am hoping that you would provide me with these
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details
as
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soon
as possible
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so
that I can book my seat for the workshop.

First
off, I would like to know the exact schedule of the symposium to sanction the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leaves
from my work. Is there any prerequisite to attend the conclave? If
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, what are they?

Secondly
, the venue
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
with a navigational map would be
highly
appreciated as I will be travelling to Perth for the
first
time. Are the participants
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to bring their personal laptop and other stationery?

Finally
, who would be responsible for the accommodation
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-
the participants themselves or your
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organisation
? Can I book a hotel of my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
? What will be the total cost for a participant from the UK and if there is an early bird discount provided that booking
is done
well in advance?

I am hoping to receive your reply
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before
next
Friday. Your
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help
and time will be
greatly
appreciated.

Yours
faithfully
,

Dev
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Odedra
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v. 3

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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