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An English speaking friend wants to spend a two week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice Write a letter to your friend In your letter offer to find somewhere to stay give advice about what to do give information about v.7

An English speaking friend wants to spend a two week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice Write a letter to your friend In your letter offer to find somewhere to stay give advice about what to do give information about v. 7
Dear John, Hope you and your family doing well. First of all, thank you for writing a letter to me asking information about Goa, India. I am really excited that you chose Goa for your two weeks vacation. As you aware that I am living with two other roommates in my apartment, therefore, accommodation in my apartment would not be feasible. However, there are so many hotels, which are not costly, near to Samoa beach and it is just 2 miles from my apartment. There are so many places to visit in Goa. One of them is Samoa beach which is very beautiful clear water ocean and there are plenty of water activities available. Furthermore, there is an amusement park, Essel World, which has activities for all the age groups. Right now the weather in Goa is very pleasant and I am sure you would like it. You could bring summer clothes and water activities clothes. However, sometimes it will rain here so it will not be bad idea to carry a raincoat with you. Call me if you need more information about Goa and do not forget to meet me while you are here. I look forward to seeing you soon. Best regards, Peter
Dear John,

Hope you and your family doing well.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, thank you for writing a letter to me asking information about Goa, India. I am
really
excited that you chose Goa for your two weeks vacation. As you aware that I am living with two other roommates in my apartment,
therefore
, accommodation in my apartment would not be feasible.
However
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
hotels, which are not costly, near to Samoa beach and it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
Writing for an international audience? Consider adding the metric equivalent.
2 miles
from my apartment.

There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
places to visit in Goa. One of them is Samoa beach which is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
water ocean and there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of water activities available.
Furthermore
, there is an amusement park,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Essel
World, which has activities for all the age groups.

Right
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
the weather in Goa is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
pleasant and
I am sure you would like it. You could bring summer clothes and water activities clothes.
However
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
it will rain here
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it will not be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to carry a raincoat with you. Call me if you need more information about Goa and do not forget to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
me while you are here.

I look forward to seeing you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Best regards,

Peter
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter An English speaking friend wants to spend a two week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice Write a letter to your friend In your letter offer to find somewhere to stay give advice about what to do give information about v. 7

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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