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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v.8

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v. 8

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is John Muller and I have recently noticed an advertisement in a local newspaper regarding a seminar on Labour Laws that you are going to organise in Dubai. I, being an HR professional from Vietnam, would like to participate in this seminar to enhance my knowledge. I am writing this letter to seek further information regarding this. As this seminar will be held in Dubai, I would like to ask for the exact schedule as I have to apply for leaves accordingly from my work. Furthermore, I would like to know about the content of the program as to what aspects of labour laws will be covered in the seminar. Moreover, inform me of the registration fee and whether I can register online. As I will be travelling from Vietnam and do not know anyone in Dubai, I would like to ask whether you will arrange the accommodation for the participants or not? How much the accommodation, transportation and meals might cost? I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, John Muller

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is John Muller and I have recently noticed an advertisement in a local newspaper regarding a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withforumdiscussionround tableworkshopconventionsymposium
seminar
 on Possible spelling mistake. 'Labour' is British English.Labor
Labour
 Laws that you are going to Possible spelling mistake. 'organise' is British English.organize
organise
 in Dubai. I, being an HR professional from Vietnam, would like to participate in this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withforumdiscussionround tableworkshopconventionsymposium
seminar
 to enhance my knowledge. I am writing this letter to seek further
 information regarding this.

As this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withforumdiscussionround tableworkshopconventionsymposium
seminar
 will be held
 in Dubai, I would like to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :solicitrequest
ask for
 the exact schedule as I This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 apply for This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departs
leaves
accordingly
 from my work. Furthermore
, I would like to know about the content of the program as to what aspects of Possible spelling mistake. 'labour' is British English.labor
labour
 laws will be covered
 in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withforumdiscussionround tableworkshopconventionsymposium
seminar
. Moreover
, inform me of the registration fee and whether I can register online. As I will be travelling from Vietnam and do not know anyone in Dubai, I would like to ask whether you will arrange the accommodation for the participants or not? How much the accommodation, transportation and meals might cost?

I am looking forward to hearing from you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
.

Yours faithfully
,

John Muller

4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v. 8

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

180 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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