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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v.6

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v. 6
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter in relation to the upcoming seminar on “Testing Automation - Industry Standards”, that you are going to organise in Toronto, Canada in August 2018. I need some details and I am hoping that you would provide those to me. I am currently employed as a Software QA Manager in a software development company in Turkey. I am keen to learn about testing automation tools and use automated testing, in addition to manual testing, to increase my scope of software quality assurance. I learned about the automation testing workshop while it was broadcasted on a local radio station. As the advertisement was being announced while I was driving and I was unable to catch most of the information like the date and venue as well as the accommodation arrangement and cost. I will be highly obliged if you can write back about the program schedule of the symposium along with the dates and venue details. Also, I would like to know how the visa and accommodation arrangements will be done along with the total cost. Awaiting your quick response. Yours faithfully, Larissa Beilby
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter in relation to the upcoming seminar on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
“Testing
Automation
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
Industry Standards”, that you are going to
Possible spelling mistake. 'organise' is British English.
organise
in Toronto, Canada in August 2018. I need
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
details and
I am hoping that you would provide those to me.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
currently
employed as a Software QA Manager in a software development
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in Turkey.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am keen to learn about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
testing
automation tools and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
automated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
testing
,
in addition
to manual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
testing
, to increase my scope of software quality assurance.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
learned about the automation
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
testing
workshop while it
was broadcasted
on a local radio station.

As the advertisement was
being announced
while I was driving and I was unable to catch most of the information like the date and venue
as well
as the accommodation arrangement and cost. I will be
highly
obliged if you can write back about the program schedule of the symposium along with the dates and venue
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
.
Also
, I would like to know how the visa and accommodation arrangements will
be done
along with the total cost.

Awaiting your quick response.

Yours
faithfully
,

Larissa
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Beilby
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. v. 6

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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