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You would like to participate in a training course. write a letter to your manager about the course and ask for permission. In your letter, Give details of the coursewhy is it useful for you? How will it benefit your work? v.2

You would like to participate in a training course. write a letter to your manager about the course and ask for permission. In your letter, Give details of the coursewhy is it useful for you? How will it benefit your work? v. 2
Dear Sir/Ma' am, I am writing this letter to ask for your permission regarding the training course Creo 2. 0 version which will be held on the next month. I would like to give you a brief information about the training session. This course is about the latest version of designing software Creo in which there will be two training lectures and on the last day, we will have to give a practical examination. I think this course is very beneficial because Creo 2. 0 is the upgraded version of its predecessor. In addition to that, there are lots of new features added in this software which will improve my work-quality. It will also advantageous for our firm as our company is also going to upgrade the software which are being used. Moreover, ramifications will be in terms of precise work-done with least time due to this new software. I hope, you will think sincerely about this matter and allow me to take part in this training program. Yours faithfully, Mohit Ratnu
Dear Sir/
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I am writing this letter to
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ask for
your permission regarding the
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training
course
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Creo
2. 0 version which will
be held
on the
next
month.

I would like to give you
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a brief information
about the
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training
session. This course is about the latest version of designing software
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Creo
in which there will be two
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training
lectures and on the last day, we will
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have to
give a practical examination.

I
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think
this course is
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very
beneficial
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because
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Creo
2. 0 is the upgraded version of its predecessor.
In addition
to that, there are lots of new features
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
in this software which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
my work-quality.

It will
also
advantageous for our firm as our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
is
also
going to upgrade the software which are being
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used
.
Moreover
, ramifications will be in terms of precise work-done with
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least
time due to this new software.

I hope, you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
sincerely
about this matter and
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allow
me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
program.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Mohit
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Ratnu
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter You would like to participate in a training course. write a letter to your manager about the course and ask for permission. In your letter, Give details of the coursewhy is it useful for you? How will it benefit your work? v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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