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You have recently attended a work-related course. Write a letter to your manager and say – What course was it, and when did you take it? – What did you like about it? – What improvements can be made in the future? v.1

You have recently attended a work-related course. Write a letter to your manager and say – What course was it, and when did you take it? – What did you like about it? – What improvements can be made in the future? v. 1
I am writing this letter to inform you about a seminar which I have attended last week. I was in Pune last week, where I had meeting with one of our clients. After attending meeting, when I was about to come there, I got a call from Catia software Limited and they told me to attend the course which encapsulates the advance knowledge of designer software. I would like to share some good things about the work-related course. Firstly, it enhanced my professional knowledge which we could implement in our work-culture. Secondly, they also gave in-depth information about how to design efficiently. There are several improvements which We should consider to implement in our organisation. first and foremost, we should utilize latest technology to increase our efficacy. Secondly, employees should be trained at regular interval of time about modern inventions. I hope you will be pleased after reading this letter and reply me at your earliest convenience. Yours faithfully, Mohit Ratnu
I am writing this letter to inform you about a seminar which I have attended last week.

I was in Pune last week, where I had meeting with one of our clients. After attending meeting, when I was about to
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Catia
software
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Limited and
they
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told
me to attend the course which encapsulates the advance knowledge of designer software.

I would like to share
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some
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good
things about the work-related course.
Firstly
, it enhanced my professional knowledge which we could implement in our work-culture.
Secondly
, they
also
gave in-depth information about how to design
efficiently
.

There are several improvements which We should
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consider to implement
in our
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organisation
.
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first
and foremost, we should utilize
A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".
latest
technology to increase our efficacy.
Secondly
, employees should
be trained
at regular interval of time about modern inventions.

I hope you will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
pleased
after reading this letter and reply me at your earliest convenience.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Mohit
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Ratnu
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have recently attended a work-related course. Write a letter to your manager and say – What course was it, and when did you take it? – What did you like about it? – What improvements can be made in the future? v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
160 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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