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You and your colleague want to use a company room. Write a letter to your manager and ask for permission. In your letter, you should: •explain why you need that room•describe which room you need and why•tell what changes will need to be done there. v.2

You and your colleague want to use a company room. Write a letter to your manager and ask for permission. In your letter, you should: •explain why you need that room•describe which room you need and why•tell what changes will need to be done there. v. 2
Respected Sir, I intend to write this letter to seek your usual support on an important matter. As you are aware I and Sam are working on a project named Crowdsourcing. In this project, we have to engage external customers quite often to gauge the pulse of the existing products of our company. Currently, we are facing a challenge in arranging different meeting rooms for customer interviews as sometimes facilities management team does not have any vacant room available at your required time and date. In this regard, we want your approval for the permanent assignment of the customer integration lab until this project is executed. This would not only solve our room booking issue but also customers will feel privileged to be seated in a custom-designed room. Furthermore, in order to make the room more appealing, we would like to suggest some changes. There should be round tables and more seating space to conduct customer focus group. Additionally, a camera should be installed in the room to monitor customer motion movements and also for recording the complete interaction for future reference. We shall be grateful to you for your outright response to our request. Yours Truly, David
Respected Sir,

I intend to write this letter to seek your usual support on an
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important
matter. As you are aware I and Sam are working on a project named Crowdsourcing. In this project, we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
engage external
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customers
quite
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
to gauge the pulse of the existing products of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.
Currently
, we are facing a challenge in arranging
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
meeting
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rooms
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
interviews as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
facilities management team does not have any vacant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
available at your required time and date.

In this regard, we want your approval for the permanent assignment of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
integration lab until this project
is executed
. This would not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
solve our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
booking issue
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customers
will feel privileged to
be seated
in a custom-designed room.

Furthermore
, in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
more appealing, we would like to suggest
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
. There should be round tables and more seating space to conduct
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
focus group.
Additionally
, a camera should
be installed
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
to monitor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
motion movements and
also
for recording the complete interaction for future reference.

We shall be grateful to you for your outright response to our request.

Yours
Truly
,

David
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS letter You and your colleague want to use a company room. Write a letter to your manager and ask for permission. In your letter, you should: •explain why you need that room•describe which room you need and why•tell what changes will need to be done there. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
197 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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