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You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. Write to the airline and explain what happened. Describe your suitcase and tell them what was in it. Find out what they are going to do abou v.8

You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. Write to the airline and explain what happened. Describe your suitcase and tell them what was in it. Find out what they are going to do abou v. 8
Dear Sir, Good day! I am Maria Judith Parayno, 23 years old. I live at Town and Country hills, Inarawan, Antipolo City, Philippines. I am now working as a Senior Manager at San Miguel Corporation. here in the Philippines. I wrote this letter because I just travelled last week from Japan to Philippines and suddenly my suitcase was lost. Until now, I have not hears anything anout my things from your airline company. Here is what happen, from Haneda, Japan airport, I actually have a total of one hand bag and two suitcase color brown and black. After I checked in, at exactly 8 o' clock pm dated March 25th of 2017, our flight got called and ready to go. After five hours, we arrived at NAIA 2, Philippines and unfortunately after I checked out one of my suitcase was lost. Which is the color black. I have an important documents on that suitcase like my birth certificate, training certificates, diploma and paper works, that is really important to me as a Senior Manager in our company. Along with this, I really wanted to know what will be the things that your company needs to do about my lost suitcase. Furthermore, I want your company to investigate all the possibilities why I lost my suitcase. This is really important to me, hope you understand and also hope things turn out fine. Sincerely yours, Maria Judith Parayno
Dear Sir,

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Good
day! I am Maria Judith
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Parayno
, 23 years
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. I
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live
at Town and Country hills,
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Inarawan
,
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Antipolo
City, Philippines.
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I
am
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now
working as a Senior Manager at San Miguel Corporation.
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here
in the Philippines. I wrote this letter
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because
I
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just
travelled last week from Japan
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to Philippines
and
suddenly
my
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suitcase
was
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lost
. Until
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now
, I have not hears anything
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anout
my things from your airline
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company
.

Here is what happen, from
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Haneda
, Japan airport, I actually have a total of one hand bag and two
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suitcase
color brown and black. After I
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checked
in, at exactly 8
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o&
#039; clock pm dated March 25th of 2017, our flight
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got
called and ready to go. After five hours, we arrived at
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NAIA
2, Philippines and unfortunately after I
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checked
out one of my
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suitcase
was
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lost
. Which is the color black. I have an
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important
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documents
on that
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suitcase
like my birth certificate, training certificates, diploma and paper works,
that is
really
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important
to me as a Senior Manager in our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Along with this, I
really
wanted to know what will be the things that your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
needs to do about my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lost
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
.
Furthermore
, I want your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
to investigate all the possibilities why I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lost
my suitcase.

This is
really
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important
to me, hope you understand and
also
hope things turn out fine.

Sincerely
yours,

Maria Judith
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Parayno
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS letter You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. Write to the airline and explain what happened. Describe your suitcase and tell them what was in it. Find out what they are going to do abou v. 8

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
235 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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