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You would like to get enrolled in a qualification course. Write a letter to the person in charge of the course and ask for detailed information regarding the course, fee and prerequisites. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Beg v.4

You would like to get enrolled in a qualification course. Write a letter to the person in charge of the course and ask for detailed information regarding the course, fee and prerequisites. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Beg v. 4
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to enquire about the detailed information about the qualification course in which I am interested to get enrolled. I have completed by Bachelor in Business Administration in 2015 and have 2 years of work experience in IDFC mutual funds as an assistant manager. I would like to pursue with Masters in Business Administration from Amity University as it will enable me enhance my skills and expertise which will aid me in building a successful career. I would like you to provide the complete information about the course with the details about the subjects included in every semester. Moreover, kindly provide the fees structure including the cost of hostel and tuition fees? Additionally, please guide me on the necessary documents to be submitted in the university. I am really interested in pursuing this course as this will help me in getting a satisfactory job with a superior position and a handsome salary. I hope you will provide me with the necessary details as soon as possible. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Prabhpreet Kaur
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to
Possible spelling mistake. 'enquire' is British English.
enquire
about the detailed information about the qualification course in which I
am interested
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
enrolled.

I have completed by Bachelor in Business Administration in 2015 and have 2 years of work experience in
Possible spelling mistake found.
IDFC
mutual funds as an assistant manager.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to pursue with Masters in Business Administration from Amity University as it will enable me enhance my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and expertise which will aid me in building a successful career.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like you to provide the complete information about the course with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
about the subjects included in every semester.
Moreover
, kindly provide the fees structure including the cost of hostel and tuition fees?
Additionally
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
guide me on the necessary documents to
be submitted
in the university.

I am
really
interested in pursuing this course as this will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in getting a satisfactory job with a superior position and a handsome salary. I hope you will provide me with the necessary
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Prabhpreet
Possible spelling mistake found.
Kaur
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter You would like to get enrolled in a qualification course. Write a letter to the person in charge of the course and ask for detailed information regarding the course, fee and prerequisites. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Beg v. 4

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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